Unbelievable

How unbelievable was arrested

Once a demon challenge me by saying that he was from the most powerful government because he couldn't get caught and that he was invisible and that his name was "unbelievable" because if I was to tell persons about him then other persons will not believe me, so what I did next time he tried to appear, I put super glue inside a glass jar and the fumes attracted and glued the demon inside the jar. Now the fumes glued the demon inside the jar and different images form inside the jar.

Reviews

[Linda alexander]

Excellent way of presentation, very clever write too, at times it is hard to make people see the truth when it involves the particular identity which is unbelievable, I want to now the after math if unbelievable escapes from the job, you need way more brain unless everyone accepted the truth and accepted you, enjoyed

[ms. barrie]

I agree, this is very clever, and original...perhaps it will make
one think before acting and treating, others before doing so.
*i doubt it though* thank you for sharing :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for your review, and you are right it is best to interpret what persons say in different ways before lazy judging them.

[ms. barrie]

You welcome, I enjoy reading your thought-provoking, unique writes...
I'll be sure to visit more often after I can pen new writes :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice story. It can be interpreted in different ways. =)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for your review Daisie, you are right, it does have room for different interpretations.

[00000000000000000000000..]

Smiles very creative id never thought that:) Great job:))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for your review Jonathan. Have you ever wondered why loud rumbling vehicles that expell fumes from exhaust sometimes get persons in bad moods and the persons that drive those vehicles have the attitude of demons.

[0000000000000000000000000000]

I haven't gave much thought but I can see Truckers in bad moods long hawls hipped up on whatever to keep going, I guess if one was exposed to fumes yeah. I ran heavy equipment and drove a truck for a few years. All that crap can get on ones nerves , I ran anything with wheels and tracks, But I wasn't exposed to fumes. Now as a welder that is a different story I was exposed to a lot of bad stuff. I can see it giving an attitude. Your welcome:)

[Mary Ochoa]

Very very Clever! This reading was very interesting for me read! I definitely pictured it correctly when I took a look at the pictures. Nicely written! :)

[Eric Pudalov]

Very interesting poem/prose poem, Psy! It was kind of stream-of-consciousness, a style which I've been into lately. I get the sense that it's political in nature, especially because of the "he was from the most powerful government because he couldn't get caught" line.

I must admit, however, that because it's in that stream-of-consciousness style, with very little punctuation and such, it makes a little harder to read. As Taiyou said below, it does sound like one of those semi-random thoughts that you didn't necessarily intend to be heard aloud.

I like the theme of it...that capturing Unbelievable in the jar caused "different images to form," as if by capturing it you caused the truth to come out about him.

This almost seems like Part 1 of a longer poem or story, as I'm curious to see what would happen to Unbelievable inside the jar. But, of course, you could leave that to the readers' imaginations.

There were a few small errors I noticed - in the first line, you say "Once a demon challenge me," and I think you may have meant "challenged." And in the second line, where it says, "because if I was to tell persons," I think it should be "because if I [were]."

Still, because this is stream-of-consciousness style, I think you can also get away with some grammatical errors, because it's coming out as you think of it. I enjoyed reading it.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you for letting me know that this style is "stream-of-consciousness style" because I thought it was at the speed of thought style, and I like the way you described it better, and the reason I like that style is because it pushes me to write and not forget what I am thinking. I try not to have that feeling of what was I thinking that I was going to write, so at that moment I start writing, Thank you again dear Eric Pudalov for taking the time to provide me with an intelligent interpretation.

[Eric Pudalov]

Hah, "speed-of-thought" style, I like the sound of that! They're more or less the same thing (at least from what you're describing). You know, it's up to you, but in some poems, if I have spelling errors, I leave them in (if I think they sound better). One of the earlier poems I posted on here is called "Winter Eyes," and the first word is "sestranded," which I'd meant to be "stranded." But I liked how it sounded better. And you're welcome - I'll do some more reviews soon, if you like!

[Eric Pudalov]

You know, I should write a poem called "Speed of Thought," and make it in that style. That would be fun.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

It certainly will be, specially with your talent and research abilities, it will have a place in the history books. Maybe this could help, you know how when persons write at that speed their brain processes the right information because it knows it can not go back to review, and that security in writing could be derived from values and beliefs programmed when we were little, which could signify that when writing is done at that speed it relies on processing and choosing at that speed from what is stored in the subconscious.

[-K]

Very interesting piece. It comes across as one of those random thoughts that you never intended to be heard aloud but once its heard outside of your own head you realize just how profound it is.(

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you dear writer, your interpretation could be seen as
Sometimes persons are afraid to speak because of what others might think about them, and they arrest themselves in their own fear.

[Perdition]

" "Hell"mann's" huh....pretty good brand for a demon. Very interesting style and story; leaves me wondering as to what "government" of jar-hell you intended and what images rose/formed inside the jar. Almost sounds political in nature and abusive as well, A very unique and rare style. I found myself thinking about C.S. Lewis and "The Screwtape Letters" ;pretty good company. Superglue?...VERY original~ Thanks!!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

They said they traveled through a parallel syncronized universe behind persons knowledge, that is when I figured that they were using the tunnels of the subconscious of persons and I started looking at what doors were getting them in there, in and out of there, that are read on a daily basis, that when a person would have a thought then they could easily jump to another person if another person would have the same thought at that same exact moment, that is when I looked in a book what the word God signify and it said "pay attention to detail" so then I started looking at words that had messages hidden that the subconscious would register but the concious would perceive as different, then that is when I knew they were demons that if they were doing it like that, then I had to find something that had a word hidden and what could be used that had fumes to glue them in there if they would try to annoy me.

[Aethereal]

Demons are negative personifications generated within our minds. It's good to imagine a counter-image of a glue trap that captures them before they do any harm. Try to stick all those negativities together into a big inky ball.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

What happened is when I put them in that jar they said they were mayans and that their objective was to annoy persons because that was the way to carve souls persons are angry, that they were collecting and carving souls because they were creating a parallel universe in a far away place for extra terrestrials, sort of similar to clones so that they could control humanity as puppets from a distance.

So then I said to them "you all are a whole bunch of idiots, I am going to do the same to you".

I told them that I had already enrolled with the Raven membership a long time ago that is in charge of pushing to hell souls that do not believe in God, that if they would not leave, that I would send them to hell, so that is how i did it, I found a jar of hellman and put super glue, because when they would try to get near the temperature would change and knew thei temperature would cause the super glue to fume so then when the jar was locked they were in there.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

When the glue dried their images are in the jar, and noticed that they draw themselves how ever they want for persons to see them and that is when I noticed that they are a menace to religion because they have no respect for God and they could impersonate how ever they know they could try to deceive persons

[Aethereal]

It's too bad that God doesn't believe in his Creator, only in himself, but he doesn't want us to believe in ourselves, only in him. Demons are masters of paradox! How could someone as complex as God not have been created by someone more complex? How could someone as complex as us not have been created by God? So many questions so little time. Order falls into place at the expense of useful energy, but where does useful energy come from? When our universe runs out of useful energy, it will have experienced an infra-red heat death. We all exist in between of a mysterious energy source event and an energy sink event. The Source is the searing infernal! The Sink is the frigid kicker, fire and ice. All we can do is watch, and touch, as we wait on Fate to set us straight.

[Mak(ayla:)]

I like it. It's adorable, and I like how you illustrate everything. But, it's very short, and I feel like you can add more. Like you're giving me the beginning of a piece of art, and now I need the rest. But I did enjoy the read.

-Mak

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Thank you, I had done a lot of research to try to find a way to arrest them, and when that demon with that name challenged me again, I had done a lot of practice arresting other demons and I uploaded the details right away live to share the message as a press release that could help other persons and writers.

I am working on adding more details.