Stop the voices in my head!!

schizophrenia!!

My acts have led to shame, 

I’m drowning in the blame, 

Myself is not the same, 

As the voices scream “MURDER!!” 

 

They hide beneath the skin, 

At my heart, deep within, 

Screech through my mind again, 

Voices are screaming “MURDER!!” 

 

Everything in me changes, 

The end within the range, 

Fueling hate, burning rage, 

As the voices scream “MURDER!!” 

 

No drug, no medicine, 

To cure this filthy sin, 

I’m in the devils den, 

Voices are screaming “MURDER!!” 

 

Pacing forth apocalypse, 

Death upon finger tips, 

Heavy loads crush the rips, 

Spellbound!! As they scream “MURDER!!” 

 

I give up and submit, 

They lie down cold and dead, 

God forgive what I did!! 

As voices have done “MURDER!!” 

 

Author's Note

Iambic meter
6,6,6,7 syllables
Triplets

Reviews

[Ruth]

Nice form and powerful piece...leaves the reader dwelling, I like that :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you very much :)

[DarkRainbowPie]

Very nice piece, I really enjoyed it :) I like how all the stanzas end with the same, powerful word, it packs a punch.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you my Irish reviewer :)
Just got back from Galway myself

[DarkRainbowPie]

No problem :)
Oh Galway? I'm from Mayo myself, not too far away, haha.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I know! :)
Please read this! You might relate
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/AdamLebzo/1115782/

[DarkRainbowPie]

Will do! :)

[rnuff]

Wow very haunting and deep. enjoyable read

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

thank you again, Kim :))

[Dalia]

I remember this great piece but I read as if it's the first time
well-penned

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

its been edited
thanks, dalia

[Summer]

I like the red it makes this poem feel guilty as charged.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

lol yeah... thank you, Summer :)