The fiends of my land

The fiends of my land

A Poem by Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-
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A tribute to the Jordanian Parliament elections, that was done a week ago...

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Hello my passion! Hello my land

I’ll recite a tale cried by sand

When clock’s pointers enfolded upright

Unleashing fiends to wreak the night

 

The wicked fiends, disguised, slipped within

The realm and minds of naïve men

And throughout the land they did spread out

Galore and brawling in all routes

 

When suddenly a black light glinted

From its shade brutes descended

With ten tongues and wicked, twisted pates

To men they transubstantiate

 

With charms of eloquence they subdued

Praised, promised, and blatantly fooled

And with hypnotic flutes they led sheep

Into an evil trance, dark and deep

 

And the sheep followed the puppeteer

Unto a dark room, tight and weird

Then flicked their souls and left them hollow

To darkness the souls were swallowed

 

Then clock’s pointers enfolded upright

The fiends hid in mantle of night

The sheep waked up from the dismal spell

To find their land devoid and nil

© 2013 Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-


Author's Note

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-
Written on = Iambic meter
9,8,9,8 syllables count
Rhyme scheme = couplets

To get you guys out of the sonnet mood :P
Not my best... I know -_-

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really well written piece of poetry, I enjoyed it from the pace to the flow to the font!!
-..slipped within//
The realm and minds of naïve men
- awesome.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

8 Years Ago

I am honored by your words... Thank you
Wow, this is very good.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a really good wrote hun! I enjoyed it. It's different from your others buuuuuut I like it!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

8 Years Ago

Thank you, its about our fake and corrupted elections
s y e

8 Years Ago

I can tell! Wonderful write as always! Talented bud!
Amazingly well written brother.. and the structure of the poem in accordance to the meter wow :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I always write on meter
Don't like free verse :)
You did a splendid write here, wonderful meter.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Kim!
I am delighted that you think so :)
The fiend of the land... does it reside in the heart of men? Great read :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

8 Years Ago

Its a metaphor my friend! Although I'd make a tiny change...

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Tags: elections, brutes, fiends, monsters, trance, flute, gothic, sheep, adam

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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-
Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

Amman, Middle East, Jordan



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