Wild Card Love

Wild Card Love

A Poem by Aethereal
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It's about a broken relationship.

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Wild Card Love
 
Trying to forget your face,
all my rainbows turn to gray,
everyplace is just a place,
everyday is just a day.
 
"Make believe that I'm still blessed.
Be the object of my quest."
 
Wishing that I may erase
sweet lies that you used to say
won't revive your former grace.
Truth is such a burning ray.
 
"Try to put my lies to rest
lest you have an empty nest."
 
Pondering our last embrace
underneath your charming sway
as you made my pale heart race
makes me beg that you may stay.
 
"You'll forget that I'm a pest
as my paws explore your breast."
 
Survival in any case
drives me to send you away.
You're a Joker, not an Ace.
Find another love to play.
 
"When I'm wild, I'm at my best.
Tallyho! I chase for jest."

© 2013 Aethereal


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okay..so what i did read right now??..
I'll try to summarize my views about it..
I won't say much..
"What do you write??..how you can be so thoughtful..the comparision and the way you co-related your feelings is just outstanding..i love each and every line of this piece..i don't know what to point out as i'm just filled with complete appreciation for each line infact each word..
And i shouldn't forget tellin' you that the title you chose is very charmin' and something unique..it's very intriguin'..''
Keep writin'..thanks for sharing..

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Basu! My poems are highly efficient emotional synergies.
Basu Gupta

10 Years Ago

ya..i got to know while going through it..and this poem is really very good
I enjoyed the fact that the italicized verses could stand on their own as a separate poem. "You're a Joker, not an Ace" WONDERFUL line! It's one I will remember and try to use in an argument someday! :) Sometimes relationships are not meant to last and no amount of begging on the part of one of the people involved can change that. Great rhyming in this emotive poem. Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Lydia! You may use my lines in arguments anytime that you wish to.
Lydia Shutter

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend!
Great alternating voices. Wonderful card analogy that works well with lost love. Favorite parts were the line "you're a Joker, not an Ace" and on to the ending with a great closing line.


Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, rutherford! Alternatiing voices and the card analogy are very rare .. read more
"Survival in any case
drives me to send you away.
You're a Joker, not an Ace.
Find another love to play.

"When I'm wild, I'm at my best.
Tallyho! I chase for jest." LOVE IT!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Fanatical Dreamer! I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
Great flow broken hearts and all .

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Moon!
Survival in any case
drives me to send you away.
You're a Joker, not an Ace.
Find another love to play.

"When I'm wild, I'm at my best.
Tallyho! I chase for jest.".................These lines I can completely relate to and brings light to my sight.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Avinash! I'm happy that you've found some light in my lines.
Tallyho ! the Fox, the hell you say that is a blooming Coyote !

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks for your funny review, lee! Such is the wild card.
A very good rhyming poem. I enjoyed it alot...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aethereal

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Sami! This is the first time that I used cards as a metaphor in a poem.
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

Good to know . You are welcome...:)
An excellent expression of a broken heart with a joker smile.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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