Romantic Lullaby

A lullaby about a romantic evening on the beach.

Romantic Lullaby

 

Waltz with me

under lunar light

where the sea

whispers songs all night.

 

Let us flee

to a stellar height

where we see

meteors ignite.

 

Let low key

love songs expedite

fantasy

as we hold hands tight.

 

Let us be

as the stars in flight

floating free

till the sky grows bright.

Reviews

[Kenaz]

Moonlight always seems to bring people together, the sun is much to harsh. If I could dance I would to this beautiful song like piece you have written.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Kenaz! Ah, so this is more dancing song than lullaby.

[Rita L. Sev]

Your words dance gently and rhythmically on the screen, Aethereal - this is lovely!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for noticing my dancing words, Rita.

[icelandicblue]

Your rhyme in this piece only adds to its romanticism. It really is a gorgeous piece of poetry.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, icelandicblue! I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

[Abdul Aziz]

Ah, I haven't read your poetry in a long time and I'm much the poorer for that. This is a very sweetly written poem that showcases all your skills as a poet. I really loved the single rhyme throughout the poem, and particularly the use of "expedite". Some times, form and content merge to make a beautiful poem, and that is what this poem is. 100/100 from me!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Abdul! I seem to be the only one in the world writing single rhyme metered poems. That being the case, then perhaps I should write more of them since they seem to be a rare as unicorns, or pink diamonds.

[Abdul Aziz]

Nah, narwhals, more like.

[Inspiring Writer]

Oh dear, what a great delightful lullaby you shared with us. Thanks for making the piece. I loved the greatest lullaby i've ever read on the web. What a coldness of words i've seen through this piece... the great impact, the passion of love, the feelings of heart, the voice of soul everything's very nicely penned by your hands ... Good description here you edited to make a lullaby brilliant. Well done once again for your beautiful Lullaby.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Inspiring Writer! I'm happy that you enjoyed this lullaby. Perhaps I'll write more of them this Winter.

[Lydia Shutter]

Dreamy and enchanting, your romantic words flowed so easily through this write. The rhyming was wonderful. A beautiful love poem. Lydi**

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Lydia!

[Jack...]

Very beautiful and smooth feel to this. Love the rhyme scheme and how it held on throughout. This is definitely a lullaby of love my friend. Very nicely done.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for reviewing my lullaby of love, Jack!

[Shane Mohamed]

Very romantic indeed. Ecstasy of emotions. The idea of a romantic evening on the beach is very whimsical and lovely. Wonderful quatrains with the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef ghgh. I need to try it out. You always give me new ideas Aethereal. Thanks for sharing.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Shane! Also, I only used two exact overlapping sounds in this poem, but using sound in this way isn't necessary for all poems.

[Great Aunt Astri]

I have to applaud you for this! Such wonderful enthusiasm conjured up by precise wording. Right on key!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Astri! Enthusiastic relationships need the right conditions to hatch at times.

[Chris]

Some sweet melodies reside within this one...

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your sweet review, Chris! All of my poems start with a melody within my mind. This brings to mind the following play on words: "A mellow D is much better then a discordant D."

[Chris]

Chuckling here... very true. Good morning.