Fire & Ice

All about the value of contrasting elements.

Fire & Ice

 

Opal moments sink within my past

joining all my tiny beads of light.

Here’s where all my precious pearls are cast

decorating my eternal night.

 

Though the temporal scale is darkly vast,

all my gems would never be as bright

lacking timelessness for their contrast.

Black gives white its everlasting might.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

love it truly beautiful.


Loved these Stanza lines.

Opal moments sink within my past

joining all my tiny beads of light.

Here’s where all my precious pearls are cast

decorating my eternal night.


Thank you for sharing. blessings. Kindred poet

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, KindredPoet! Opal moments are a joy.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're very welcome. blessings. Kindred poet

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm reading Lucretius this week. Your poem follow his thoughts and logic. He tried to figure contrast and element. People believed him loco. If you read his words. He was. Contrast of things keep the world off balanced and confused. I like the title and the thoughts create by the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Coyote! Astronomers say that at the beginning of the Big Bang if our universe had expanded in complete symmetry we would not exist because our universe would have lacked contrast. We owe our being to chaos.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with your logic.

[Kenaz]

I enjoyed this poem greatly; however, in the fifth line you seem to have strayed away from the nine syllable count you used for the rest of the poem, otherwise the rhythm and flow seem very precise. This piece is a well written piece, contrasting light and dark. It is true that without light we would have no shadows or any semblance of sight, and without black, white would not seem as bright as it does. Thank you for your thoughts

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Kenaz! In my fifth line I used the word temporal which may be pronounced with either three or two syllables according to the dictionary that I’m using: Tem … prel instead of tem … pe … rel. I have kept my nine syllable count. We're both correct.

[Kenaz]

Ah, interesting word choice then

[Aethereal]

Yes, there are many words in the English language that may be pronounced with more or less syllables. The word temporal was my best word choice for this poem out of all the candidates that came to mind.

[Frieda P]

Excellence at work on this page....love how you twisted strength into the darkness.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your strength & darkness review, Frieda!

"But thy eternal summer shall not fade,
Nor lose possession of that fair thou owest; ..." William Shakespear's Sonnet XVIII

[Ghost of Jupiter]

This might just be my favorite from you Aethereal. The beautiful metaphor, twist of brilliance. You can never truly appreciate the light until the you have witnessed the dark. Wonderful write.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Kalypso! If you look closely, you might find a hint of William Shakespeare’s methodology within my lines.

[Pryde Foltz]

Opal moments sink within my past
joining all my tiny beads of light.
Here’s where all my precious pearls are cast
decorating my eternal night.

Really great metaphorical and spiritual piece. Very sophisticated.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Pryde!

In Many Ways

We're the moments that we seize,
dots on i's, that cross on t's.
Carpe diem
every gem!

[wordman]

I enjoyed this short story loved the theme

[Aethereal]

Thanks for reviewing this story-poem of mine, wordman.

[wordman]

welcome glad to do it

[John]

Opal moments can be interpreted in as many ways as the poem has readers. I enjoyed this a lot. Good use of a fixed verse form linking the small with the infinitely large.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, John! Pearls as somewhat like opals, and it's the pearls that are cast. The number one is small compared to one million, but a one may be divided into a billion or more pieces. There are infinites inside of infinities. Everything has meaning.