Love's Trigger

How love may be triggered.

Love’s Trigger

 

Love springs from a triggered mood

deep within your core.

If you show some gratitude,

I may trigger more.

 

If you change your attitude

as you’ve done before,

I shall serve some special food

then we’ll dance the floor.

 

Sometime in the interlude,

I’ll serve an encore.

I’ll let sherry wine collude

with a music score.

 

I’ll increase the magnitude

of your lion's roar

all dressed in my seminude

gown that you adore.

 

Part Two

 

Some say love’s a triggered mood

filled with vim and zeal.

Do you have the aptitude

to change how I feel?

 

If you’re clever, if you’re shrewd,

mine‘s your heart to steal.

There’s no need to utter lewd

verbs to make me peel.

 

Mentioning a platitude

from an old newsreel

makes me yearn for solitude,

and an early meal.

 

Don’t let trivia intrude

on a bliss that’s real,

for a mood needs better food

if it must congeal.

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

One word: Bravo!

Thanks for motivating me to write a poem with that style. Practice makes perfect so I'll just make other poems with this style which now I will call as Aethereal's Trochee.

I compared this to "The 7/5 Trochee", created by Andrea Dietrich, of 2 or more quatrain stanzas with the following set rules:Meter: 7/5/7/5 ; Rhyme Scheme: a/b/c/b or a/b/a/b

You know, the only difference is your style have a perfect rhyme scheme throughout the 4 quatrains. But the meter is also trochee (7/5/7/5).

Credits to: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/75trochee.html

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Daisie! I'll be looking forward to reading what you come up with. Thanks for motivating me to write a poem dealing with triggered moods. I wasn't planning to do this until you suggested it. I’m the kind of writer who has the ability to quickly write things on demand concerning just about any topic under the Moon. Insisting on a perfect rhyme scheme is the kicker.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

......... =)

[Pryde Foltz]

I’ll increase the magnitude
of your lion's roar
all dressed in my seminude
gown that you adore.

Great work, Aethereal.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Pryde! A great beast escapes from her cerebral menagerie.

[MsJewel]

A sweet little sing-song of a poem. I love the rhyme and the smooth flow as if your words were dancing upon the page!

:) Julie

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed reviel, MsJewel! Some words are playful children singing songs and dancing the minuit.

[Aethereal]

Be sure to read part two of Love's Trigger just below part one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i would imagine this buffet of attention could do that ...for sure...

in last stanza, did you mean "lion's roar"?

love the word "collude" and your use of it here.

nicely done.

jacob

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review and typographical correction for “lion's“, Jacob! Using the word collude was just my way of personifying wine and music.

[Aethereal]

Be sure to read part two of Love's Trigger just below part one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"no need to utter lewd verbs to make me peel"

god, i really like that line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and yes, i got that personification with "collude"!
it worked well.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review of Part Two, jacob! I thought that you'd enjoy the line with "peel" in it. There are more parts that could be written, but enough is enough for now.