She

A girl as twilight

She

 

When she comes to me

under twilight skies

with her wine dark sea

deep enchanting eyes,

 

then we cease to be

held to worldly ties

as reality

begs the moon to rise.

 

Men may not foresee

how she nullifies

every fantasy

that preoccupies

 

pen and ink that's free

to idealize

to the nth degree

moods that they surmise.

Reviews

[Tan-90]

The twilight hour, a period of many possibilities. Between the approaching darkness and the surreal pastel shades in the sky, one is truly left quite vulnerable to let wonder, desire and temptation in to their mind, .."She". "She" not a mere person but the regret, the pain, the excitement, the loss, the overwhelming sensation of love, fear or remorse that we camouflage so well in the bright sun light, that peaks in these fragile hours.

We are both inspired and bewildered by the euphoria of the hour, an "awakening", a realisation a spiritual moment.. that we let her in.. wondering all the what ifs, missed opportunities, past mistakes, lost lovers, lost connections.. letting your imagination go wild.."we cease to beheld to worldly ties"

And sometimes in our weakest of moments, we let her "nullify" us, we act on these feelings, our impulses throwing caution to the wind and risk the crumbling of the usual familiar, they system that works.. call your lost love and say that you still love him, buy the biggest bouquet of flowers for your wife..drive over to your mothers house to give her the longest hug, or tell your high school nemisis that you have forgiven him..

Some of us turn to silent words etched on paper with a heavy hearted pen, that result in beautiful pieces of work on Writes Cafe :)

Thank you for sharing your gift with us. I was so inspired. Beautifully written.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for this wonderfully detailed review, Tan-90! Books could be written about that mysterious ancient mood that comes upon us at closing hour of the day.

[Tan-90]

So true. If a day was a month, the twilight will be it's full moon. And on that hour we all give in to lunacy or our basic instincts..

[Aethereal]

It’s a mood that’s a prelude of those dreams that pull us into the nocturnal abyss of our subconscious minds.

[Tan-90]

Precisely..So beautifully said...

[Jumbo J]

She sounds like she's everything that a man could desire... a She that could entice the moon to rise... a wonderfully penned quatrain formatted poem... with latitude that lingers in thought of... She is my all.
Well penned my friend a very enjoyable read.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Jumbo J! I'm happy that you enjoyed my Classical format. I wonder what poets from ages past would have said?

[Bright Ocean Star]

Ohhh, this is sooo good. I love it! I'm saving it and giving it 100/100. Thank you for writing and sharing this beautiful artistic creation with us.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Bright Ocean Star! This poem was only an express of a mood inspired by her, the Lady of the Dusk.

[Bright Ocean Star]

:) beautiful inspiration....

[Ghost of Jupiter]

wow, Aethereal, this one... well all I can muster is a wow. Smooth and silky words of sentiment over a divine beauty... must be a vision to behold to elicit such words from you.

"then we cease to be
held to worldly ties
as reality
begs the moon to rise"

Gorgeous... dumbfounded by the loveliness of your words. well done as always. I think I am going to tuck this one away in my favorites to bring out again when the heart needs it's strings tugged on...lol

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Kalypso! I'm happy that those lines put you in the mood.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

hahaha, yes what kind of mood is the question...:P

[don't know]

This poem flows really well would work well as song thats not taking awaty from its pure poetic beauty.then we cease to be
held to worldly ties
as reality
begs the moon to rise" like this line. The stars watched without moving.
Nothing seemed to move anywhere. Thats my own weak attempt. good write

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, don't know! I’m thrilled that you described my poem in the light of a van Goth painting since I’m Dutch American, and my mind never strays too far from the artistry of my Dutch ancestors.

[zainul]

Wonderful depiction of a love figure at the twilight.
I specially enjoyed the clever use of the mathematical term,"the nth degree".
Thanks for sharing the natural piece.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, zainul! It's only natural that I should do so since I'm a Mathematician. I could write Mathematical poetry, but few would know what I’m talking about. Differentiable Manifolds, Real Analysis, Fuzzy Logic, Topological Synergisms, and Group Theory would make no sense to most people.

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
I am very happy to discover a Mathematician among the most famous poets of WritersCafe.
Yes,Differentiable Manifolds, Real Analysis, Fuzzy Logic, Topological Synergisms, and Group Theory would make no sense to most people.
However,you can write Mathematical poetry in practical real life story as you did in this poem.Mathematics is a part of life which is used in day to day activities in many diverse forms.
Welcome, Mathematician Poet!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There is a great song that says "Because the night belongs to lovers", and there is no greater love affair then that with the mysteries of night. An Enchanting little poem.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review! All the pretty moonlit muses come out to play at night under the stars.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i feel the muse in twilight...i know, because she comes to me in ink that is free...she fulfills fantasies, dreams, hope...but also reminds me of the ones that have been dashed like rocks on a violent seashore.

nicely done, Aethereal.

jacob

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Jacob! But every poem inspired by her falls short of the grace displayed by the Twilight Muse herself.

[Zahra]

Wow loved this piece. Beautifully penned

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, I have A Voice!