Internal Chatter-By:Akeen V.

Night falls inward spiraling towards fright.

Morbid thoughts slowly flow during night.

Blood leaks quickly from the wall;

Leaving positive thinking to steadily fall.

Death circulates creating a trapping vortex,

Throwing all life sideways, completely out of context.

The enemy does not lay upon fears doorsteps.

But rather inside, where chemical imbalances

Within membranes in the brain, continuously fight challenges,

Between sanity's quite sensation and insanity's loud agitation.

At times sane thoughts are kidnapped; locking them away in darkness.

Replacing them with bouts of insanity, such a repetitive occurance.

Until one day arises, beyond that moon lite horizon.

Fighting shall cease from sickness of trying.

Sanity's marvelous and also protecting light

Will  meet defeat, expelling righteousness throughout the night.

Peering in, darkness can easily be perceived,

Covering everything which is known to be right.

An altered life and mind becomes received.

Now insanity's light, shines perfectly bright.

Yet neither insanity nor sanity are given victory

For both did not conquer what was sought after so rapidly.

Forgotten by both, another waited very patiently.

Watching them bicker while laughing hysterically.

Waiting for the time to present itself,

For a true victor can commend himself.

Insanity's holds an obvious fault

Once its peak has been breached

Another entity takes over while it takes a halt.

Therefore when it is breached

Insanity's door slams at its feet.

Victory shows what everyone should see

That madness has won

And shall forever control me.

Reviews

[Christy Sargent]

Akeen, your poem was frightening to me because it let me in to see the battle. I know someone who fights the same battle within and what scares me here is that madness took over the fight. I find your poem unsettling but was not that your intentioin? Good job.

[RitaMargarita]

it is obvious that u do have your own unique style which is impressive
somehow i found this poem a bit messy when it comes to rhythm
coz it changes all of a sudden and dont really repeat it
but i like it much
well done))

[Shadow666]

Very interesting, and unique. I have a thing for insanity :P PS: I believe darkness is a real force. Even if I am not religious.

[Tony]

This is very good, Akeen.
I am not liking the message.
Not because it is not true, but because the author has surrendered to Darkness.
I know this sounds crazy, but things that come from our pens and our mouths have a way of manifesting themselves.
Oh, and Darkness is not a force at all.
It is merely an illusion created by those who do not yet think Light.
Thank you for bringing your work to my attention.
I will be keeping an eye on you, sir.

[sweetylee1994]

ok, this is probably one of the best poems I have ever read, and I read alot. It is deep and it has touched me. It is honest and it shows the actual realism that is hidden in our minds. great job.

[Marie Harrison]

Loved this piece. The flow is amazing. Well done.

[C. Porter]

Oooh, my favorite so far, even with my disliking of rhymes.
Kudos and thanks for sharing!!

[India Brooks]

This one is my favourite (:
Very very good. You capture sense of surrounding and emotion well.

[Melody-Rose;]

I really enjoyed this poem, you're a fantastic writer.

[Jeff]

Excellent write about the war within our minds.