Lady Killer

I lit her body and breathed her odour
My head spun round to the scent
Of her fragrance
She stayed silent while I kept her burning
In desire and lusty pleasures
As we sinned
Her fumes traveled to my very depth
And my buds were stigmatised
By her taste
I was the Devil's offspring for sure
But her halo turned me
To an Angel
In soft kisses when she touched my lips
All of my senses sighed and swayed
With her hypnosis
A faint smile adorned my face
On making forbidden love to the lady who
Burns in orange
And while I saw her dying when
I slowly took all breath
Away from her
She shrunk through my fingers
With the same igniting passion she kindled
Only for me
Because I could not bear her slow death
I doused her fire once
And for all
For she is no mighty Phoenix
To rise from her ashes
When she dies
But her love is like no other
Since I killed her and she shall
Kill me back.

Reviews

[Roger Turgeon]

Compassion in crime?....we can only hope you are spared as well

[akihsna]

You can portray it that way too, Sir. But actually, the whole poem is just an ensemble of a hyperbolic language I used to make a little confession. Haha

[Roger Turgeon]

I see.....I kissed a girl and I liked it huh? LOL

[akihsna]

Haha nope, it's totally not that! The Lady Killer is not even "human", so...

[Roger Turgeon]

Oh duh!!! now I get it.

[akihsna]

Ah! I'm glad the mystery and curiosity were still there though.

[Roger Turgeon]

Your welcome...he said inhaling deeply

[Vidya Bacchus]

Wow this was some dark poetry .You wrote it so brilliantly Anshika.Into my faves :)

[akihsna]

Thank you so much, Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Blogger]

Now...this is POETRY. Well done. I read it twice. I enjoy this kind of talent.

[akihsna]

Aw thank you so much, you just made my evening! :) Take care.

[Blogger]

Your are very welcome! Have a nice night.

[akihsna]

I wish you a nice night as well :)

[Blogger]

I just read it again. This is very well written and kind of chilling too! OMG.

You are very imaginative...

[akihsna]

Oh boy, really? Now this is a bit flattering, I confess! Thank you so much, again! ^^

[Blogger]

I am only being honest. Your writing is lively and entertaining. We need that here.

[akihsna]

I try as much as I can to keep it personal AND entertaining at the same time. Some friends of mine happen to relate, which makes me glad, while some are left in a mystery, which also pleases me! I guess I couldn't thank you enough!

[Blogger]

:0) No problem. I appreciate being involved in a good write.

[Jack Wolfe]

I glanced through a couple of your pieces, but I'm not the best reviewer for commenting on Haiku, or even the the best for poetic readings, but this was longer, figured I'd stick around. In all honesty, my interpretation of this may be way off, I know of the phoenix, and this began as a lust filled harmony for a love, and considering the reference to fire, I got the impression of a pyromaniac professing his love for his lust, his love, his being. Again, I'm probably way off.

[akihsna]

Hello there~
First of, thank you so much for taking time to glance through my writings!
And as for your review, I'd say it's close enough. But I ain't no pyromaniac though hahaha!
Thank you once again, Jack~