In October My Dear

  I will meet you in October

under the golden umbrella tree.

I will wait there patiently

under the sodden falling sky

until night falls

to mingle with the leaves,

and the rain falls

to mingle with my tears,

in October, my dear.

  I will meet you in November

when the fog conceals my pain

I will wait there forever

ankle deep in the puddles

until night falls

to copulate with the mist,

and the wind blows

to tangle in my hair.

In November, my darling.

  I will not meet you in December,

when the snow scours away my fear,

I will be long gone from here,

follow my footprints if you dare,

until night falls

and I've faded to a distant,

and black memory,

to wrangle with your dreams,

in December, my love. 

Reviews

[anon]

I'm surprised to find poets still employing capitals myself after E.E Cummings and later Charles Bukowski changed the unspoken arbitrary rules of English grammar. I don't use capitals at all, but it's a writers individual choice... also as the previous lady pointed out the I's were all uppercase anyway...

Your poetry writing is second to none and this is a beacon of your talent. Well done.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a haunting feel of sadness here mingled with the leaves and the darkness.. a longing unfulfilled calling out... Beautiful and despairing..

[Jeff Loquist]

so subtle...so sad...so haunting. there is much poetry in waiting, isn't there?

[Jaci]

Hmm. Beautifully written poetry. I completely enjoyed this. I would also like to point out that all the I's are capitalized. Using the word fall "twice" worked well with the point you were making. I "honestly" found this quite lovely to read. Thank you for sharing.

[MJ Durston]

I enjoyed this, there were many spelling issues, flow misconceptions and grammatical errors, but first i want to compliment you on your poem! It was so beautifully done, I liked how you moved from month to month describing them all so differently, I'm not sure if you were attempting a rhyme scheme at all, because it did seem a little awkward while reading. I think the poem would be better formatted in stanzas to represent to differences between the months, but that's up to you. As well as you continuously failed to capitalize your letter I's in a few paragraphs. Also in the beginning you use the word "fall" twise, and very close together - which comes off as either a bad rhyming job or just not enough attention paid to the poem itself. Apart from those little tips I truly enjoyed this, and for it being quarter after two in the morning, I think I can say honesly - this is going to be what I dream about tonight.

Best of luck in future writing.
Melissa

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. ahhhh ... beautiful ... amazingly poignant ... yet subtle ...