The Juggernaut of Snow

The Juggernaut of Snow

A Poem by 李[A]
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A small poem showing the good in people. For http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/I%27ll-tell-you-what-you-can-write-about!/14157/.

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High on the mountaintops,
A sheet of snow
Lies with perplexity,
Of why it moves when - OH!


A “Yodel-ehh” resonates through the mounds,
As men in ornate costume play pipes with bags.
A pauper and a wanderer listen:
One dressed for adventure, one in rags.


All of a sudden, a demon roars.
An abominable snowman of sorts:
An mudslide of white,
the fine white quartz


Rushes down with an intensity
So strong, so brazen.
The anger of mother Gaia
Seems to have been awaken.


Now the pauper and the wanderer,
Both misunderstood,
No different at the face of God,
Run as fast as they could.


It was hopeless in the presence of wrath.
As the pauper shielded the wanderer with his cloak,
The wanderer shielded the pauper
With the heat of his body as he spoke.


Although those words were never heard that day,
The good will of both men
Reached God in such a peculiar way,
That he had saved them, for another ride on a sleigh.

© 2011 李[A]


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This was a really interesting piece haha. The imagery was sublime, genius and ofcourse very poetic. As Blu said, there's a nice balance between the emotion of the characters and the events happening around them. The emotions of the characters can be assumed where you haven't explicitly stated them, something writers don't always do (I know I don't). And finally, you get massive points for the actual story in the poem :D

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~ thanks for entering this in WINTER --- very nice -- imagery and story -- like the contrasts too ~

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Very good!! Good job! A prize is on the way!

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Wow, there is so much happening in this poem! Full of action and deeper meaning. Well done!

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This was a really interesting piece haha. The imagery was sublime, genius and ofcourse very poetic. As Blu said, there's a nice balance between the emotion of the characters and the events happening around them. The emotions of the characters can be assumed where you haven't explicitly stated them, something writers don't always do (I know I don't). And finally, you get massive points for the actual story in the poem :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like how you appreciate a good story. Alot of times author focus way to much on emotion and it becomes boring. You did a nice balance an I am ion LOVE with your vocabulary!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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You tell a story with the same beauty of poetry and I really appreciate your use for that. The flow is near impeccable as well! Thank you so much for sharing such a fantastic write. Great job, A. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I like this write but it's a piece I like I don't love it.My style in poetry and writing is very weird.But I still find it as a fab write :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Added on July 25, 2011
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Tags: avalanche, juggernaut, snow, people, goodness, yodel

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李[A]

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Hey! I'm A. (figure out the rest of the letters :P). Anyways, I'm a sixteen year old boy who normally doesn't write that much, but hey, I'm practicing vocabulary and writing skills at once so why not .. more..

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