Forbidden Dream

Forbidden Dream

A Poem by 李[A]
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Style Encouraged by http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/watchtheworld/636482/ For http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Get-published!-GLBT-COMMUNITY/13834/ About a gay boy and his dreams :(

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Just a few nights ago,

In a castle far away,
My dreams were hospitalized so sweetly,
During the absence of                             day.


There I met my Knight in Shining Armor,
So strong and brave he was.
A beautiful sight to behold;
His attitude a rarity under the street-      light.


He didn’t know my secret;
Why no one did.
I didn’t speak the words,
For a single word                                   brings


The pain of a thousand suns,
Or the coup of my mind by pests.
After all, I’m not like other boys.
But most of all, I feared                          reality


                     Of waking up, away from forbidden desire.

© 2011 李[A]


Author's Note

李[A]
Well here's my first GLBT poem. Enjoy!

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This poem can take on so many meanings. As I read it, I did not have in mind the sort of thing that you did as the poet. Yet, once I read your author's note, I fully understood the intent. I also commend you on your use of structure. It's creative, yet simple to figure out. Thank you so much for posting this poem, I very much enjoyed it. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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It's just beautifully written. And from the structure to the flow, everything is just so pretty. I really enjoyed the read and you indeed deserve a review!
And being a LGBT related poem, I can feel that forbidden desire you wanted to share.
Just wonderful :)
Keep up the good work.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Excellent writing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good poem with an unusual structure,Good work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the formatting of this poem. Great meaning; great word choice.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Kim
like the setup of this, Enjoyed the write...wonderful write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Just - beautiful. One word describes this moving poem perfectly. I love it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

interesting

Posted 9 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderful, I love it! Especially the 'daylight brings reality' it makes the reader really connect with the poem. A really good piece... Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice poem
and i enjoyed :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not only is the poem good in itself, but your presentation says everything. Good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: forbidden, dream, gay, boy, GLBT, knight, shining, desire

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李[A]

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Hey! I'm A. (figure out the rest of the letters :P). Anyways, I'm a sixteen year old boy who normally doesn't write that much, but hey, I'm practicing vocabulary and writing skills at once so why not .. more..

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