Guardian Angel

Watch over my life.....guard me from the evil around me.

 

 

Alone I sit in silence

although pain

is deep within

 

I cry in hopes you’ll

hold me and console my

soul while it dies

 

Again you let me down

so I rush into the

bubbling waters

 

Rushing waters pound

my pain away slowly

as I see the candles burn

 

I close my eyes to

reminisce of past

pleasures and pain

 

Suddenly I awake from

bubbles that tickle my nose

 forcing me to breathe

 

-My Guardian Angel-

  

 

 

Author's Note

Some days we have to let others do the work for us...

Reviews

[Stephen Ownby]

I like the water metaphor.

[Enigma]

Bubbles to the rescue...!!!
It was a great write. I'm feeling that you follow a particular pattern whenever you write your poems. A well-thought out frame-work, I'd say.
This one was quite sad. I can feel the emotions that are flowing through the poem; emotions of helplessness and defeat and lonliness. And when the water starts flowing above our heads, we surrender. But thankfully, there are some bubbles out there which will always come to your rescue.
A fantastic write!! Vey well-penned....
Thanks for sharing with us all....^_^

[Mariana Silva]

Your poem is heart-wrenching, nonetheless, the sad emotion that is threaded throughout your poem is touching as well as thought provoking as to how others may perceive their own need to surrender once in a while. Great job.

[M@]

I enjoy what you touch on here, and even more so how your title worked it's way into the poem's meaning. There are times in life where we much wallow in what makes us wish we were dead, where we let it consume us. Here two things can happen: either we get over what gives us problems rather easily and quickly, or something postive (usually very small as well) in life comes our way to remind us that even in the worst of things we're still capable of laughing. Very nicely done, and very well compacted; you've put a great deal of meaning into a small bit of space, making the impact of the poem and it's meaning much more powerful. And as I mentioned before, I like how your title worked it's way into the piece. At times, the best guardian angel is ourselves and our connection with existence.

Very nicely done, a well written piece.

[jakelsen]

Interesting and a whole new way to look at bubbles.

[Samuel Dickens]

Thank God for tickling bubbles.