Light

To those I have reviewed: refrain from reviewing me for I have no use of input if the perspective is tainted, positively or otherwise. If you wish to challenge my views of your work, please contact me, and I shall change my rating as I see appropriate.

Light be not abroad,
there is no escape
from a world of deceit
when around you is hate

hostile on the senses
is seeking the truth
forgetting is demise,
failure is your doom

riot in the streets
and none shall recall
temper in their will,
let majority lead all

save pity for tomorrow
be relentless for today
bring mayhem, bring violence,
bring compliance, bring sway

shout at the gods
they will not debate
to silence the hounding
to keep dissent in wait

hearken to your madness
and do not delay
for when all else fails
light exceeds the gray

Author's Note

Write as you see fit.

Reviews

[Lady]

I want to start off by saying that this is a very unique piece. Though it is a bit dark and frightening, it's not only very well written, but original in many different ways.

Within each verse I can sense an unbelievable amount of emotion, and there is a hidden beat that I find very interesting.

Very nice

Lady

[Through the Gateway]

Good rant. Ever think of writing lyrics for metal? I could get into this.

[S. Janszen]

Tres bon.

[Crowley]

Your writing seems to be very idealistic, I like it. If you have something to say just say it. It flows, the content is a little hostile at times but to me that makes good subject matter . Rhythym and content are good, way better than a great deal of stuff I read here. Keep up the good work and keep on posting. Judging from your other reviews, I am not sure that you will find this post useful....if not, doesn't matter I like your stuff and will probably hang out and see what else you have to say anyway.

[Anatar]

I wonder why you can review your own work. Dubious.

[Legion]

"shout at the gods
they will not debate"

Those two lines say it all. Kudos.

[S. Janszen]

The poem is well endowed with a variety of pleasing and expertly chosen words. It would be excellent to review your usage of punctuation, however, as it seems a bit inconsistent. A refreshing work it is, though, for it promotes the employment of one's brain. This is not a poem to be read only once, but to be pondered.