Life

We all cry with tears of despair,

and each carry a burden,

we no longer can bare,

and just give up,

for life doesnt seem to care

 

Life is an attack,

on those it beleives cant last,

becauseof certain qualities we seem to lack,

but we still try for fear we'll lose,

and so on as it continues,

we still pretend to be,

what the world wants to see,

and travel through our days hypnotized,

and embodied in lies

 

Were so consumed with our own need to fit in,

we need to break these ties,

to obtain freedom in our lives,

we'll stand side by side,

and release are burdens,

as we no longer continue to hide,

for in this centruy,

we choose to hold the key,

to lock the world down,

and to make them finally see,

what the worl failed to do to you and me

Reviews

[Brittney Solomon]

for better understandin of the poem lines 3 and 4 of the first stanza should be reversed, other than that the composition is great and the message is a very vital one i enjoyed it

[Tasha]

This was amazing! Very well done.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A sleek and powerful prose, full of emotion and delicate imagery, well done.

[Shayla Sayer]

the last line was so true. fix your spelling/typos and enter it into a contest!