Pressure

Take in to concern that bullying is stupid and is not worth losing a life for... Stop Bullying and many will prosper

Bliss is the fear in her eyes,

this glimmer of hope gone frail,

the last stretch of love...

 

All hope gone from there taunting shove

 

Anger is the grimace of her smile,

A deathly flat line stretched for days,

conquering all that is hate...

 

Unmasked tears waiting for that fatal date

 

Shame is the scarlet of her cheeks,

her blister cry of tears,

of the innocent truth taken to far...

 

Wanting to exhale oh lovely star

 

Freedom is the world to a fade,

a fog of memory,

the sight of a gun,

 

The last sigh of her life now done.

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A truly structured piece that lend reason to emotion, well done, good read.

[THWebb]

Very passionate.....vivid and full of emotion.

[Seshat Nidaba]

I like the intensity of your compact structure, the use of color is a nice touch. Thank you.

[joshua deathdealer]

I love the way you worded this poem as well as the format. Excellent work.

"Anger is the grimace of her smile,
A deathly flat line stretched for days,
conquering all that is hate...".............................xx

[stars are far]

this was so nice ...
well done :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Wow!! This is a very vivid imagery, a very emotional piece... you have done a great job depicting this devastating situation. Great job!