A Tale Told

~raw and unrefined poem~

Why did you go?
Why did you never return?
Will I ever know?
Will these embers always burn?

I cannot now reach out again
Despite my ache for resolution
At the mercy of time's healing
Longing for that true revealing

Questions linger in my mind
What were we supposed to find
Here at the end of all the roads
The paths we walked and tales we wrote

There's nothing here but emptiness
When we had wished for sunrise bliss
Ît seems the only souvenir
Is recollection's fondest tear

Carry me away, my pain!
Flooding sorrows of my soul
Aching love's torrential rain
Wash away this hateful hole

How can newness blossom here?
In the mulch of shredded memories
Held aloof by wounded fear
Is the vision hope so clearly sees

And yet the beautiful work of art
The Painter paints upon my heart
Must not be soiled or rejected
From bitterness must be protected

I must carefully guard
The glorious shard
Whose faithful hope would never fail
And lovingly re-word the tale

"Photographs of memories
Hopeful laughs and simple looks
Countless miles, endless trees
A thousand smiles in my books"

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

it is raw .. lots of emotion .. lots of pain and recognition of it's weight ... not real, as it is in the past .. how we love to carry it .. masochists i guess ;) love the shard! i think when we suffer without understanding it is a part of the global humanity that Christ felt on the cross .. we get to carry that sliver .. that broadens the weight .. so it does not fall on just a few .. not crazy for the form and rhyming .. not quite prose nor abstract free verse; but the story is deep and emotive .. thanks for sharing
E.

[Aneto]

I really like your thought about the suffering of Christ and our partaking in that. Thank you for sharing!
(I'm also not ecstatic about the rhythm on this one; an experiment with looser parameters for a more raw writing process. I vastly prefer more strict cadence, and almost didn't publish it!)

~Aneto~

[Einstein Noodle]

i'd say keep exploring .. how else do we find our own "voice"? ;)

[Chris Shaw]

Heartbroken. I felt the rawness in this piece. Stanza six is excellent. Nurse that shard that will bring light in the future. Devastating when there are no answers to questions of why. Finely written.

Chris

[Aneto]

Thank you for such a kind and tender response, Chris. I will certainly keep pressing on with deep appreciation for your encouragement. :)

~Aneto~

[Writergurl]

I must carefully guard
The glorious shard
Whose faithful hope would never fail
And lovingly re-word the tale

I really like this verse, This is quite a write here full of heart tugging words.
I can feel this write, it's emotional

[Aneto]

Thank you so much for the kind words and review. Have a blessed week!

~Aneto~

[Matthew Kult]

Sorrowfully heartbroken without the answer to why. Devastating

Great read.

With love

Matthew

[Aneto]

Thank you so much, Matthew. Much love and appreciation for the review!

~Aneto~