Pain

Pain

A Poem by Anexi
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Something I wrote long ago

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Hurts too much to breath

Hurts too much to think

I gave you my heart so that I wouldn’t sink

Into the darkness in which I drown.

You made me believe that I was the one,

But all I ever was; was no one.

So many days drag on in despair,

Because I know now

That you never cared.

© 2012 Anexi


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Unfortunately this is true for a lot of people. Well put together. I like the flow of the piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hi Anexi,

Great poem that speaks from your heart. I'm really sorry that some people will say any thing to get what they want and then run away with your feelings. You sound like a great caring person with a big heart who most certainly deserves better.

Keep your faith and believe that the right person will show up in your life when you least expect it. Don't give up your heart because of 1 selfish fool.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Anexi

11 Years Ago

Jack, thank you so much for your comment
You made your point clear.
'Hurts too much to think' is my favorite line.


Posted 11 Years Ago


I like this one

Posted 11 Years Ago


Anexi

11 Years Ago

thanks
Not usually into the whole love-poem thing generally, but this one really works.
=)
I love the line "But all I ever was; was no one"
A contructive note: when you say "hurts to much" it should be "hurts too much."

Posted 11 Years Ago


I gave you my heart so that I wouldn’t sink
Into the darkness in which I drown.

this was the best line i found in this poem....
infinity likes..

but i wanna ask you something..shouldn't there be"TOO" instead of "TO" in the first two lines..



Posted 11 Years Ago


very sad poem reflecting so much pain. i think you were talking here for so many people who have heart pain. it really hurts when we give our hearts to those who dont deserve. only one point, too much instead of to much in the first two lines.
very nice poem. thank you for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago


Who was the one that did this to you? :(
It sounds almost like my situation...just mine isn't as dark...
I love it by the way :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


very sad, but well written. i liked it, great job!
-Mariah

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow! i loved this! :)
Savvy

Posted 11 Years Ago



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