Hot Summer Night

Senryu

 

 

 

 

---Sweat Glints On Hot Skin

---Teasing Lips And Fingertips

---Eyes.. Begging.. For Love..

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

Talk about saying a lot in a few words! You do a great job of capturing desire and longing in this senryu. Wonderful imagery! Of course, I'd expected something a bit more nature-centric, but this was a pleasant surprise. Good choice using the ellipses at the end, too - it makes us hang on for a that extra second, increasing our sense of anticipation for the next words. Why did you choose to only use two dots in the ellipses, though? Why not the traditional three? It'd put more space between the words... :-)

[Gandré]

a successful senryu. perfect.
i love such small messages, one
keeps them on his mind.
thanks also for reading my new poem
I am glad you understood my philosophical meaning
and the playful undertone.
thanks.

[Fran Marie]

Oh those hot summer nights~ aren't they simply divine~ Great piece and
THanks for submitting this lovely senyru to the contest~Fran

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Short but strong!

[shadadakiya]

how sweet that the touch of love can be in only a hot summer night can bring

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A wonderfully written Senryu. I am often amazed how words, few but well chosen such as in your writng can express so much. Thank you for sharing