You Cheated

Why can't you love me the way you should?
I know you could...
Instead my heartache is what your choosing...
It's me that you are loosing...
I hate what you've done to me,
I was all that you ever wanted me to be,
I'm not blind, I can see..
I see your game,
I'm not insane, you are hurting me...
After everything I have done for you,
everything I gave you, you turn around and cheat?
All the times and memories we have spent together you even said we'd be forever..
The bond we share,
I never thought you would dare,
dare to hurt me this way,
all the lies you say...
You made me sick,
she is what you want to pick...
You made me cry while you told a lie,
you made me want to die...
How could this be your not here with me?
You are not that man I thought you were,
now I know, now I'm sure..."Never hurt you",
is what you said,
now I know your not a man of your word...
Made me feel crazy when I asked "why your phone was off",
yet I knew you were hurting me,
I knew I was right, you were out of my sight,
you really ruined my life...
How could you ask me to forgive you?
How many times can I? You have lost my trust over what I call lust...
You chose to hurt me it was a must...
I am beautiful so I have to be brave,
brave enough to move on,
I will be strong, without you,
my life won't be wrong..
I will forget you in time,
and no, no it's not fine...
I'm glad that your not mine...
You use to be my greatest treasure but now your never...
I hope your happy for what you did to me,

Right now your blind but soon you will see.

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

It seems like this was written as a bit of a rant, which is definitely a relief for the author as they express their feelings--and this was full of emotion. The problem with the rant-like tone is that it comes across as unpolished. The rhymes seemed to muddle the poem because you had to craft each line to fit the rhyme, and it ended up feeling unnatural. Also, for a painful poem like this one, rhymes can take away some of the seriousness and make it feel more sing-songy. I know that it just feels good to let everything out in whatever way possible, though.

[Helpless]

hmm....very sad and angry, but good work

[Yina]

This was pretty intense. It's really interesting the way you have the whole thing but the ending crossed trough. Good job:)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Awesome piece. Very original, like you were trying to write something but every line is trash it seems like, you are never able to say what you want correctly. That is what I see here. Nice work for sure.

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very bittersweet. I loved the cleverness at the end, with the front.
Very powerful write; I honestly felt every word jab my soul like you where ranting at me.
Great job!

[Sukriti Suki]

I like the strike-through...Maybe for more impact you can remove the strike-through in the last line, to actually see...Otherwise wonderful work, creative and very well written.

[Ruth]

Some people take longer to see than others, but they do, eventually! Great poem love..a lot of emotion here that can truly be felt!
xx

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good write. I enjoyed reading it. I can feel the anger within your words. I loved how you have the line going through the poem because it adds to your anger. Just know that men can be like this sometimes...because they don't know what they want in life. I hope this never actually happens to you. I know how it feels though because my ex cheated on me...thanks for sharing.