3+1-4+2=5

Letting go

You are a beauty

with your cute smile

that makes my heart

go boom boom

You with your pale paper like skin

that remind me of the moon and

those eyes of bruning coal, that stare

deep into my soul

You with the secent of blue blue ocean

and hair as dark as the night

I give my heart to even if you wouldn't

ever be mine's

You, who could have been my soulmate

my light, my heart, my everything.

You, my darling will forever be love

in my poor, loney and broken heart.

Reviews

[Enigma]

Wow!! That was so sad. You've captured the feeling of despair and suffering and lonliness in such a impressive way that your poem creates a gloomy mood around the reader's mind. It like you're sitting in a corner and just talking to your own self...
It was brilliant!! The rhyme and the whole concept. I would suggest that you read it one more time and umm..try to end the lines with the rhymes. It would prove a finishing touch. Just move a few words here and there, it'll do the trick...
Well Done!!

[yuki]

k, thanks