Confession to life

A Poem by Ank

Its like a small child is confuse about the perspectives of life and making a confession.

Yeah! this life is capricious

Making my journey suspicious

Let me escape from this world of fake

Let me be aerial let me be lake

Someday elates me someday afflicts me

Its a secret story filled with the glory

Its untold mystery making new history

Hey! give me chance to you dance

I was so lonely you were the only

And watch-out! I'm startled you made me sparkle

Is it your resolution to give me this hard emulation

Are you a quiet night or this lovely moonlight

I don't know why but wanna rely on this deceptive lie

I wish this expedition should never end as its my loyal friend

Oh! I can't make out, it fascinates me or it hates me

Please unveil this secret so that I should not regret

Are you my soul or I'm sole?

© 2014 Ank

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Rene Salinas

I finished reading and thought of ambivalence. See it is risky to post what your intentions are about the writing because if they do not reach the goal you become succeptible to been informed you haven't. I think that some of your intentions would be helped here by punctuation rather then none as you decided to go. "Hey! give me chance to you dance" could be "Give me a chance into your dance" "Give me a chance by your dance" or other possible gramatical permutations. Both i"ts" are it's and therefore, "Its untold mystery making new history" would become something like "It's and untold..."
"Are you a quiet night or this lovely moonlight" would then become "Are you a quite nithgt or are you this lovely moonlight" and so it continues. It is dificult to assume you have intended the words to be presented this way. As for the theme then it did not come across to me as you wished but that does not mean that with some minor tweaks this writing cannnot express exactly wht you intended it to, making it a enthusiastic expression of a child's purity of heart.

Thankyou