Letting Go

Challenged to write without form and rhyme... first attempt..

What?

write without form you say

let go

bloody hell

 

Radical, nonsensical, alien to me

unbelievably incredible

I suppose I could try

 

Let words tumble

random as raindrops

spattering the page

elegant in their asymmetry

for proportion is not required

to let the words speak

just let them be

 

no plan

no form

no structure

a delicate, beautiful unfolding

of a mind

a heart

 

Art mirrors life

or does life mirror art

perhaps I could try letting go

of  me

 

Open up my closed hand, mind, heart

admire what is within

draw it closer to lovingly gaze upon

before gently blowing  it away

showering the world

with fragmented kisses

Reviews

[Carrie Montgomery]

wow...good job. You seemed pretty comfortable "letting go" and writing in this form. I understand where you are coming from, I have been told very often on other sites that I don't always have to rhyme...but, I cannot help it either, it is just "habit" I guess...I seem to automaticly think that way!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

I love this piece! You accomplish the mission April. It's terribly hard for me to write w/o rhyming, but I think you did it entertainingly and humorous, but it still felt poetic and clever!

"no plan
no form
no structure
a delicate, beautiful unfolding
of a mind
a heart"

You're a definite talent and what I appreciate most about you, is that your prowess as a poet is filled with humor and originality, but you're a classic poet to me still. I love your diversity......

[*^*my*beautiful*zelda*l..]

wow! Although the whole thing makes little sense, thats ok. That's really creative of you to just write whatever comes to mind like that-- maybe i should try writing something without form too-- although right now my mind is focused on one thing so the whole poem would just be about this boy I like at school -_- ANYWAY, id probably suck tho, seeing as how the only things that come to MY mind are completely random and have absolutely nothing to do with the real world (I like toast....) eh, on second thought, I hate copying people so I'm probably gonna stick to regular poems and stories....

[__Flaw__]

Yeah just have a look at the reviews and you don't need to say n e thing else.

I guess you are the one experimenting a lot...like free form...rhythm and then sonnets...and well till now you have done a bloody good job at everything.

Might i have an autograph before it gets too cozy in here.... :) ... Tada.

[R J Askew]

wonderful, especially the last verse...flows nicely and has a daring feeling about it as you test out the new air of formless freedom! in matial arts they put great emphasis in leading the forms, moves in detail...but the aim is for the form to become automatic in the actual fight.

[Marquise]

et words tumble
Random as raindrops
Spattering the page
Elegant in their asymmetry
For proportion is not required
To let the words speak
Just let them be

wow april! you did a very good job on this piece. you always do very nice work, but this is by far to me one of your best! keep it up!

[eli mercuree rue]

its quite liberating to write without form if you ask me... but then writing without form is a form itself so its pretty formal this place we die in.... ya kno?

nice
free
form
about
free
form

[Sean M. Addams]

Flows together nicely... very descriptive.. I like this one alot!!

[E. J. Gette]

Bravo! Bravo! You already know I like it, but I have to put in my two cents.
More, more, we scream for more!!!

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A very good title of this piece.....Well done, just let the words flow and they will take care of themselves.:)