Sitting in Coffee

Sitting in bed,

drinking coffee,

looking at your flowers.

 

Eating bed,

drinking flowers,

looking at coffee.

 

Drinking in bed

eating coffee,

while the flowers watch.

 

Sitting in coffee,

looking at bed,

eating flowers.

 

However you look,

it makes no sense.

 

 

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

wow. i love the sort of abstract rearranging of these 3 things. this is what i love about art. how it's about taking the ordinary and shifting them about. changing the order.

i read this as sort of 3 things we tie to relationships....

each has multiple meaning which works great as the emphasis and image changes with each stanza.

the last stanza almost makes me thing that the writer has a sort of wry humor about the way relationships are and/or end. that no matter how you try to mix things up .... "it's sad and makes no sense".

very creative!

i would love to take this stanza by stanza but i'm fighting yet another cold and my head is fuzzy. i will later on.

[sheerpoetry]

I loved this...im adding it to my favorites!

[Kgosi]

ok... thanx for the abstraction... wats up?

[Ralphy]

Awe, that is clever it would take a soulful talent like yoursefl to come up this brillant piece. It has been a while since I've actually read your work and honestly I'm sorry I've missed it. Oh back to the review, I suppose this wasn't a happy time for you because to dice up the words like this means things are a little dicey at the time. Really, looking at flowers and drinking coffee is not that bad if your daydreaming...but what do I know. I am the one eating the bed, drinking flowers while the bed watches...nice write

[Tina Kline]

I really enjoyed this poem. Sometimes no matter how to explain why you're
doing somthing, it makes no sense! I love the way you made
that point in your poem!

Tina

[Kelley]

Nope that didn't make any since at all.......lol
I loved it!!!
I like when a writer does things like this. It makes reading fun.
Thanks April Child keep up the great writing.

Kelley

[R J Askew]

Like watching a philosopher turn his mind inside out. And for my next trick... I suddenly feel one of those dots in the middle of the line above is watching me!

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Makes perfect sense to me...... that's good coffee.....

Love, Kath

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

BRILLIANT!!!! Though I'm starting to question whether or not that action really is sad, being that I partake often(minus the flower). I love this write! Very weird and I wasn't sure where you were going, but I wanted to! Very good write!

[John Cuttito]

I loved it. the playing around with patterns that seem to make no sense but somehow do. this is my favorite thing about words. thank you.

[Collodi]

Very cute piece. I wondered if you were confused because you hadn't had your first cup of coffee in the morning, and then I realized that was the point. Cheers.