Brown Eyes

Somewhere in a field of Bluebells.

 

Tattooed shoulders rise

from purple pool,

brown eyes gaze up at me,

reclined in goddess fashion 

on a large orange mushroom.

 

“Will you?”

 

Flowers, ferns and

trees freeze and even the

po faced stone mayan statue

seems to draw in sharply….

 

“Yes”

 

The bluebells samba,

po face raises his arms,

shouts “hoooooo” and ferns

frantically swish fringes.

 

I see only brown eyes.

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

what a psychedelic delight this is. different from what i'm used to reading from you. this reads like an acid trip. kind of alice in wonderland no?

the brown eyes cutting through the very vivid dali atmosphere is intense and i think the point.

the alliteration at the end is soooo good. "ferns franctically swish fringes". mmmmm.

the really great thing about this poem is that it has energy, a dangerous quality and it pushes us into the bizarre, daring us to be entranced.

bravo!

[Tree]

Striking imagery. And your language is thick, with sudden movement. Clever and mysterious write. The reader would like to be privy to the backstory, that gave birth to the inspiration

[April Child]

Hey, thanks for reading. Well I could let you in on the backstory but sometimes a little mystery is far more interesting ;)

[dieuxsansculte]

What a wonderful, colorful, magical scene you've created in this. It appeals to me on so many different levels that I can't begin to count them all.

“Yes”

Isn't that the answer we all want to hear to our most important questions?

This is truly a beautiful, mystical slice of utter tranquility. Thank you for sharing it with us.

[Hello, Goodbye]

oh the imagery and feelings held are impressive in their forcefully emotional pressure.. I love the control and focus of the specifics of your work..

[Liza]

beautiful imagery - lovely emotion relating through nature

[Wondering Mind]

This is so very romantic in a very unique way. I quite liked the reference to Samba as a natural motion and the delightful alliteration of the ending.

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

Oh wow I see only brown eyes - Even in less words you gave a picturesque moment. :-) Love it.

[Raja]

It gives a picture, which is unique and lovely, off course. The poem has a real touch, and it is full of romance.

Liked it a lot!

Thank you.

Raja

[Emily B]

oh, my . . .

this is really something