Existence

There is haplessness..

and there is pain..

I wish I could be whole again..

I wish the scars on my soul would heal..

But the thought seems unreal..

 

There is agony..

And there is anguish..

A broken heart ..lots of tears..

And then there is life to endure..

 

I want out..

Wish all of this could end..

But it’s a constant continuum..

And my wishes will all go in vain..

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Read this twice and think of it as a roll of distant thunder, quiet yet specific .. i want to send it away, don't want to be part of it. Life's full of storms - and sunshine, we just can't control our 'lot' as much as we 'd like to but accepting that fact helps .. we do the best we can then, wake up of a morning still wishing

See how your words make the reader think, i've typed far too much. But, thank you for sharing, and PLEASE, don't ever want out of life, it's a magical place if you look in the right places..

[Searching 4 Serenity]

You always manage to express what the majority of us feel by using only a few words.

[SpokenWord]

At any given moment any of us could come to feel this way. Life isn't fair nor was it created to be. The good thing about life is that it changes and sometimes that change is for the better. Great write.

[.........]

I think it's clear what your message is, something that is common among people that are like you, especially writers. Although your flow is just a little bit difficult to stay with, it's still a good write and easy to interpret.

[freelancejouster]

this wishing is powerful, but the clumsy rhymes in parts of the poem diminish that some. were this as raw as it's trying to be, it could be really great.

[kyrie]

Sometimes it's better to acknowledge that wishes will go unanswered than to cling to them violently. This letting go of that which you yearn for so strongly is not resignation but learning.

[Akshat♥]

Existence is most important for everyone to live a good life..
wishes are growing each day in pain...
but you have to move each day becoming stronger..
good job done:)

[Steven Cetta]

The highs and the lows, that's what life dishes out. You captured all the elements in a short and eloquent poem. Nicely done.

[An owl on the moon]

Existence.. life in movement, yet lived moment by moment... And here is that pain that overwhelms and suffocates... You paint the world in winter shadows and I sigh for that sad place...

[Art]

sometimes life just carries us through it all...nice work on this visual and reflective poem of the continuity and sadness we live through...