Suffocate

Suffocate

A Poem by Arrinae
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I wonder if anyone understand what I'm trying to say...

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Feels like I'm suffocating,
But I'm breathing just fine.
A feeling I've grown used to,
I have it all the time.

The slightest brush, 
From even a hair,
Touches above my collarbone,
I find myself gasping for air.

I feel hands there,
Could it be a ghost?
I don't see anything,
This feeling I dread most.

It's always there,
No matter what I do.
Sometimes I can ignore it,
I wish it was through!

No one else knows it,
They wouldn't understand.
I can't answer the questions,
They would demand.

I wasn't abused,
Not in that way.
Who could understand,
The words that I say?

© 2019 Arrinae


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I love this poem, I love the tone it sets, hopelessness and desire. I like the rhyming scheme, the descriptive words, and the flow of the poem. I also like how the poem talks about being misunderstood, thank you for sharing, very nice work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

I'm pleased to hear that you like it. I put my thoughts and feelings into this as much as I could. T.. read more
A beautifully descriptive poem. Your feelings about it shinning through. I know it is a horrible feeling but you found a great way to express it. 'I feel hands there, could it be a ghost' I really enjoyed this the most. Knowing something inanimate is keeping your breath from reaching your lungs. Could you possibly make the font a little bigger, between the bold and the itallics it was a little hard to read some of the words.

Posted 5 Years Ago


It gives a rather unsettling feeling. I wasn't sure whether this was from your story, so I looked at the reviews, and was a bit surprised to hear you suffer from this inexplicably. The poem gives a clear sense you're very frustrated with it and people not understanding. D:

I'm not sure why with my ability to stare at text walls unfazed for hours, but whatever font or style it's written in was a bit of a struggle to read without getting rather close.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I too can associate this with anxiety and to anyone who knows what this feels like you can really tell the desperation of people not understanding and worse, not knowing what to tell them or how to explain yourself. Thanks for sharing. It does help to read the pleas of other people who suffer from things we sometimes can't help but feel alone in.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Sectando

5 Years Ago

It can be a long, lonely and destructive road...I haven't come across many doctors who suspect fakin.. read more
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This reminds me of my anxiety and panic attacks. They are paralyzing trick that the mind plays on us. Those who do not have them can never understand that some have now way of controlling them and others have yet to learn how. This is a very deep expression of this. Whatever it is you were trying to express I feel like you gave it great depth as to let people draw their own conceptions. Thank you for sharing. Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

Sorry I didn't respond to this sooner. Read the review just as I was falling asleep and forgot about.. read more
Excellent use of rhyme here, and the rhythm is well done indeed.
You've conveyed fear very well, it feels like a very personal self-doubt being voiced in lyrical form.
That form seemed to soften the intensity of the words right at first, but at the same time the rhyme allows the message to sink both easier and deeper, allowing for a moment's pause at the end to think about what was set down.
Well done.


Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Landred. And it is very personal. I've felt as though I'm choking when I can breathe just.. read more
The rhyming is brilliant and doesn't feel forced. The last part speaks to me, I think.
I enjoyed this a lot. Good write, man.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! I am very pleased that you enjoyed it.
"I feel hands there,
Could it be a ghost?
I don't see anything,
This feeling I dread most."

A very good rhyming poem. Bravo.............


Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

Thank you Sami
Sami Khalil

5 Years Ago

You are welcome....:)........

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