Coconut water

Winners are adventurous

Barren island;
Alone I live;
On the way, I wonder;
A coconut tree in the mid, Carrying a single coconut;
Severe weather it survived;
Yet, bold enough;
Adventure is the key;
Climbed slowly to the top;
Realised;
Coconut fallen;
How adventurous the journey to the top;
Likewise to the bottom;
Carried coconut, searching sharp stone;
Breaking layers too strong;
Peeped inside;
To drink tasty water;
To survive….

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

This is certainly quite an adventure... a lone coconut tree with one coconut, and you manage to climb up and down and quench your thirst... on a barren island.... as such you must survive on what is around and search even more for nutrients... Happy journeying....nice descriptive words
Warmly, B

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!
Warmly, B

[nastasimir]

Thank you Arundass
Great idea to describe humans' struggle to achieve everyday tasks to survive
Symbolically. I like it very much. In my country, there are no coconuts but there are olive trees which helped people here for millenniums to survive. The old-fashioned way to pick up olives was to be on your knees long day and pick up olives from the ground to prepare them grind them and get olive oil.

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend 😊

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Arundass,

A very intelligently clever and witty piece of writing here, and I like coconut ... It is the laxative effect of consuming too much of the milk that is a surprise ...

Marve

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend 😊

[Chris Shaw]

Survival isn’t always easy. For some it is much harder than others. The fittest survive, those with disabilities are likely to succumb first. Enjoyed the read. Thank you for posting.

Chris

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend 😌

[Neville]

so very much enjoyed I near broke into a sweat .. and now have to go lay down .. Neville

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend 😊

[Sami Khalil]

You have to see the content to realize the truth, to sense things and to learn values.
An excellent poem with meaning

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir.

[emmajoygreen]

As said in slang terms - 'way to go!' You achieved the essential with determination in both the content of your poem and the fine way in which it is written, sir.

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend.