Locked in

Locked in

A Poem by Ashentara

I'm locked in my own body


There's all those feelings, those things I have in me

Powerful things, life-or-death stuff

That no one wants or needs to hear about

but they're there

They're me

No one cares

Yet I can't just ignore them

And Yet I do


they're all locked in my body

And I'm the speechless corpse

© 2009 Ashentara

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you have said what so many writers feel, we feel more, long for more, ache for more out of life...if you begin to let it out in torrents you may be surprised at how it is acceppted and the people you will attract...i always enjoy reading something as real as this.

Posted 6 Years Ago

It sounds like you are a poet who needs to beat out their words and release what is locked in your body. Thank you for sharing this one.

Posted 7 Years Ago

So much said with so few words. Brilliant.

Posted 9 Years Ago

very good........great work.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Wow that ending was really quite the exclamation on this brilliantly emotional write.

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful emotion you have stated!

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on October 31, 2009



Brest, France

Bio... hmmm.... what can I say. I'm 30 going on 31, I'm French, I translate video games for a living, but my dream would be to become a real writer. Working on it! I have a daughter whose name is Gab.. more..

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