Fly Me to the Moon

And let me play among the stars...

As we gazed up at the stars that night

Feeling the light mist caressing our faces

I smiled at you and sang “Fly Me to the Moon.”

“No,” you countered as you clasped my hand in yours

And rocketed us into the darkened sky.

I marveled in wonder as we passed the Moon

Her pale face beaming at us in knowing.

Your lips brushed against mine as we drifted past Mars -

His blush deepening as we bid him farewell

And Jupiter winked his crimson eye.

But at Saturn we halted and you bowed to me,

You twirled me and hummed a waltz

As we danced across her graceful rings.

With a strike of teal lightning

She cried happy tears of crystalline carbon

Glittering bright in their mother’s radiance.

We halted in wonder as the jewels fell around us

In slow, gentle showers of precious stone,

Tickling our faces and adorning our hair.

Then one fell to my finger and there it stayed,

You looked at me with a gleam in your eye and proclaimed,

“She says you should marry me.”

Author's Note

Just a little love poem that came to me tonight. Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[Rachel Mason]

My favorite piece of imagery is, "And Jupiter winked his crimson eye". Gah, even though the narrator and their lover are in space, there isn't much distance between them;P I've loved this song for such a long time and your poem definitely served it justice. Now I believe that I'll be imagining the descriptions in your poem whenever I hear it again, giving the song even more meaning!

[Ashira Macy]

Aw, you are so sweet, I am so glad this called out to you. I love the song as well, Sinatra's voice, I mean come on! Haha. Thank you again dear!

[Rachel Mason]

I have such a crush on Sinatra's voice! You are very welcome. Thanks for posting the poem!

[Frieda P]

Your words have a radiance all their own, love the dance amongst universe's treats, I noticed the moon was female and the other planets male, aside from Saturn with her adorning rings of light....smart cookie. ;) A romantic romp in the twinkling of love's eyes..

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Frieda. I guess Saturn is also supposed to be male, but she always seemed so beautiful and feminine to me.

[Frieda P]

I concur, think you made a wise choice there....my pleasure always Ashira.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

BEAUTIFUL.
A wonderfully romantic poem. I loved this a lot.
Added to my library.
Clive.

[Ashira Macy]

I am so happy you liked it! I don't write many romantic poems, but when I do they jump out of my pen. =)

[Sami Khalil]

"You twirled me and hummed a waltz
As we danced across her graceful rings.
With a strike of teal lightning
She cried happy tears of crystalline carbon
Glittering bright in their mother’s radiance."

Beautiful sentiments, imagery and structure. Excellent...:).................

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Sami, I am thrilled you enjoyed it!

[Nusquam Esse]

I really liked this one; I tend to be fairly critical when I review, but I don't have any suggestions. At first glance I was thinking "these lines seem a bit long for free-verse", but as I read, I banished these thoughts from the imagery which this carried. I loved the way you personified the planets, and the imagery of dancing across the rings of Saturn (The description of crystalline carbon was a nice touch) And the ending was sweet, and brought a smile to my face; now that is a 'diamond ring'

[Ashira Macy]

That means a lot then, I am so glad to hear it. My free-verse poems do tend to have longer lines, so I try to make up for that in content. I am happy it made you smile, most of my work is darker, so every once and a while I aim to brighten people's days. =)