Fly Me to the Moon

And let me play among the stars...

As we gazed up at the stars that night

Feeling the light mist caressing our faces

I smiled at you and sang “Fly Me to the Moon.”

“No,” you countered as you clasped my hand in yours

And rocketed us into the darkened sky.

I marveled in wonder as we passed the Moon

Her pale face beaming at us in knowing.

Your lips brushed against mine as we drifted past Mars -

His blush deepening as we bid him farewell

And Jupiter winked his crimson eye.

But at Saturn we halted and you bowed to me,

You twirled me and hummed a waltz

As we danced across her graceful rings.

With a strike of teal lightning

She cried happy tears of crystalline carbon

Glittering bright in their mother’s radiance.

We halted in wonder as the jewels fell around us

In slow, gentle showers of precious stone,

Tickling our faces and adorning our hair.

Then one fell to my finger and there it stayed,

You looked at me with a gleam in your eye and proclaimed,

“She says you should marry me.”

Author's Note

Just a little love poem that came to me tonight. Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[Rachel Mason]

My favorite piece of imagery is, "And Jupiter winked his crimson eye". Gah, even though the narrator and their lover are in space, there isn't much distance between them;P I've loved this song for such a long time and your poem definitely served it justice. Now I believe that I'll be imagining the descriptions in your poem whenever I hear it again, giving the song even more meaning!

[Ashira Macy]

Aw, you are so sweet, I am so glad this called out to you. I love the song as well, Sinatra's voice, I mean come on! Haha. Thank you again dear!

[Rachel Mason]

I have such a crush on Sinatra's voice! You are very welcome. Thanks for posting the poem!

[Ty]

This is incredible. It is all so very much in the moment. I love Sinatra.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Ty, I do too!

[J. Land]

I've been accused of being a romantic at heart, but you're a romantic through and through. Any journey through our solar system brings out the romance and Saturn, that maker of gems, inspires.

Your lines fill the mind with an ecstatic journey across wondrous moments that reflect the commitment that ring signifies. What a wonderful audience for such a beautiful moment.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much for your sweet review. I do have my nights where I feel my hopeless romantic bubble up and boil over. Last night was one of those. =)

[little thoughts]

wow. its something very very creative. well done

[Ashira Macy]

Thank lioness, glad you liked it!

[Sophy Freebirds]

"Starry night he,luch bhi bright he,kiss- wiss karle we,yu ki fight he"... ha . This was a li'l line from my native tongue.. meaning the sky is starry,our mood is turned on... so baby kiss me with fervour unknown. Well i loved this piece.Going to my library.The vivid imagery created here forces me to jump towards the sky,but uhhhuunn..! I am a mere human :p..Jokes apart.. This was blindingly dreamy and took me to wonderland.. Well done Ashira.

~Sophy

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Sophy you are so sweet! I loved that line, though I probably read it all wrong, but it sounded really pretty. I always wish I could jump into the sky and play throughout the solar system. This will just have to do for now. =)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yea.. unless you find an astronaut hubby.. J.K. :) its always a pleasure Ikira.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yea.. unless you find an astronaut hubby.. J.K. :) its always a pleasure Ikira.

[yuki]

very very cute and romantic very well done :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Yuki! Glad you enjoyed it!

[kublakhan27]

A starry sky always seems to lend itself to romance, but you've upped the ante here and taken us on a romantic journey through the cosmos...you really nailed the visual aspects of each planet...a person unfamiliar with them would come away from this poem able to easily visualize them in their mind...nicely done :)

[Ashira Macy]

Exactly right sir! I wanted to start with a cliche and then try to move away from it. I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Saddam]

Your imagination is very sweet. I like the explaination. Halt my heart.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you SSADD, I am happy you enjoyed it!

[Skai Rain]

Very pretty poem. For some reason it makes me want to dance under the stars.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you! I felt the same way as I was writing it! XD

[Jackson H. Harley]

Love this poem :) the abstract imagery and wonderful imagination made this stand out from a lot of other love poems I've read, great work :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Jackson, I am so glad you enjoyed it!

[Jackson H. Harley]

The pleasure's mine :)

[Marie]

THis is just beautiful. I love the romantic images of dancing across Saturn's rings.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Marie, that means a lot coming from you.