MORTALITY IN SHOCK

MORTALITY IN SHOCK

A Poem by kublakhan27
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Inspired by the graphic, provided by Frieda...08 14 14

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Levitating like a liberated nightmare
over my subconscious of a limp mortality
with a scythe that channels shark teeth
spearheaded by a needled fin of fatalistic intent
I scour catatonic instincts for an abscess of comfort
in the grey folds shadowing his black essence
(The best hope I have for a deciphering of weakness)
A cape of flaming pitch wavers in the crackles
of his path like the remnants of a live cremation
A hood aflutter flirts with the status of
a showpiece of excess in the context
of an antithesis of face or any human semblance
susceptible to rationale's potential
Surely I am frozen in a prostrate of vulnerable
paleness pasted on my trepidation's stillness
Never have I felt so hapless in mortality
as his direction clarifies on an implied steed
under his impeding festival of shapeshifting advance
I'm a humble epilogue on human legs
in the presence of an answer to the question
we pursue just enough to stay in a convenient ignorance
There can be no doubt in this phenomenon
I have found enlightenment in the darkest possibility

© 2014 kublakhan27


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My goodness this sounds like quite a story. What is the graphic called? It is possible that this world is in even more turmoil than our own, or at least what I have personally seen of our own though I don't pretend to know the extensive horrors that go on outside of my peripheral vision. Anyway, you did a wonderful job of bringing the reader into the story. I like to read yours a couple of times to make sure I don't miss anything, you always pack so much wonderful description in. Cheers my friend. Now that I am almost completely done with the millions of read requests I came back to I can start reading all of my friends' poetry again. I have been missing yours and a few others.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

You humble me with your kind word my friend :) I'm not sure what it's called, or if it has a name..... read more



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surely i am forzen by this piece :D Well done here

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much Eve :)
Hahaha, I should have known this would be inspired by Frieda, LOL -- a lot of your poems seem to be recently. This was great Steve. You seem to be on a roll with your poems as of late. Great job, loved the message.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Haha What can I say, she is a muse...I was on a roll for a bit but I think I'm running out of steam .. read more
Very unique poem, good write

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Thank you Blake.
"Shark teeth,fin of fatalistic intent"- damn boy,, you floored me with this one. Yes,we are shrouded with vulnerable weakness... but slowly how the poem unfolds at last it gives me chills...finding enlightenment- we learn through our mistake. Once we travel through the darkest hours we are sure to overcome any imposter... very optimistic at the end covered with the darkest of blankets.. :) well done Steve

~Sophy

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed this little journey my friend...well I guess it isn't really a 'little' journey .. read more
My goodness this sounds like quite a story. What is the graphic called? It is possible that this world is in even more turmoil than our own, or at least what I have personally seen of our own though I don't pretend to know the extensive horrors that go on outside of my peripheral vision. Anyway, you did a wonderful job of bringing the reader into the story. I like to read yours a couple of times to make sure I don't miss anything, you always pack so much wonderful description in. Cheers my friend. Now that I am almost completely done with the millions of read requests I came back to I can start reading all of my friends' poetry again. I have been missing yours and a few others.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

You humble me with your kind word my friend :) I'm not sure what it's called, or if it has a name..... read more
Upon the first reading, your amazing word choices stand out. Read again, and that shroud of darkness descends. Read it aloud, and it takes on a whole new dimension. Steve, your poetry itself is a master class.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend...I can't tell you how much your support and kind words mean to me...I'm tr.. read more
I may have said this before, but boy! do you have words!

Somehow I feel like you try as many ways possible to capture that idea/feeling in your mind, and just put them all down like an avalanche of poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

You humble me with your kind words my friend...sometimes it's an avalanche and sometimes it's an int.. read more
Once again an amazing write by you my friend. You weave words with emotion so well and it's always a pleasure t read your work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed this one Troy, it's a pretty candid piece needless to say...thanks so much for t.. read more
So dark this is suspicious of a felony. I feel like the more i read the deeper I found myself in a place that I did not want to be. Questioning mortality is not something i think i want to do anymore. You made me feel, and feel a lot.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

What can I say, it definitely came from a deep and dark place, I'm not gonna lie...I have this nasty.. read more
Cory Barrett

8 Years Ago

i will fully admit to have a dark place in me as well, but i am afraid of it. So i run and find my .. read more
kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Haha A good idea...I hope I can track down that place at some point ;)
Marvellously dark, though I suspect this dark entity would easily fall for Frieda's charm.
A magnificent write my friend.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Haha Who wouldn't? Glad you enjoyed it Ana :)

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