Betrayal

It is of as it sounds.

Lost to this fire,

This endless array of disease.

Consumed by desire

And my endless aiming to please.

 

Cast to the darkness,

Discarded and used.

Affronted by the starkness

Of the level to which I was abused.

 

These chains of connection,

Broken through time.

I feel nothing but rejection,

But to anyone else, "I'm fine."

 

I both love and abhor you,

For what its worth,

For all that we've gone through.

I've known you since birth.

 

This pain that you forge

Has left me forsaken.

It's yourself you engorge.

I am not mistaken.

 

So please,

Take these words I adivse.

This disease,

It's my pain; your demise.

 

Your last act to me

Was an act of betrayal,

Yet you still can not see

How our friendship has failed.

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

Morgan this is absolutely stunning I love the predicable rhyme sheme I love the flow the outpouring of truth mixed with bitterness sadness love hated and so many conflicting emotions.... its one that gives the readers emotional receptors quite the workout and just a stunning piece of work all together! Thanks so much for entering it in the let it go contest...

~Frances~

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

well, to start with, i felt this way when i was living with my father for 4 misarible years. it sucked, so i can relate to this poem to a point. in that aspect it makes the poem that much more grand. i love the rhymeing scheem too. another great write.

[Star-Runner]

This is very well written here, I like this it is imapcted with emotion, You show a remarkable talent. You are gifted.

[Phoenix]

This is powerful. Although, like I find in much of my own stuff, the rhyme scheme is a bit predictable. Also, not that I am anybody to say anything, the cadence is choppy. A very wise person once told me that reading your piece aloud is essential. All in all a good piece! It conveys much emotion. You tug on the heartstrings quite well!