Not Written In Stone

Not Written In Stone

 

i wrote you

a letter every single day

letters to tell you

just how I feel

 

written in neat, curved

writing i told you

just how sweet

i thought you were

how you made my heart

glow

 

letters in which i wrote

with various colors of ink

pouring out my whole being

to you

 

i wrote you

a letter everyday

 

i wrote you letters in which

i told you how you made me

bloom

 

eventually

i found myself

pressing harder on

the paper

than i had before

 

creating tears in them

similar in shape

and size

as the ones

inside of me

 

i began to send

letters

with creases

and bumps

 

ink droplets

pouring

from my eyes

 

as i wrote

the anger

bubbling within me

 

my last letter

addressed to you

contained no words

 

but was blank

because

i had none that

could reach

as far

 

and deep

 

into the cracks

of my

heart

 

to describe

just

what you

 

had left of me.

Reviews

[Chryiss]

Even though each line was short all the way through, the continued shortening of the lines toward the end made that build up more impactful; the words became more succinct and striking in terms of the emotion (anger/sadness) conveyed. The line breaks too allow certain words to stand out while allowing different interpretations that layered those feelings. For instance, the breaking of the full phrase "written in neat, curved /writing."
Sometimes nothingness can say it all as with a blank piece of paper.

[Austin_Meehan]

Thank you so much for this review! I appreciate the praise, and with that said, if you see anything that doesn't work or anything that could use some tweaking, please let me know!

[Chryiss]

You're welcome! And I will; however, just keep at it! Refining, rethinking, revising~ Each piece will become better than the next :)

[Onlyme]

From love to attraction to smitten to then dramatically nothing. Well written in such powerful words. Demonstrated with such flair and skill. Exceptional piece of writing. The ups and downs of your emotions from love, affection, admiration, to upset, anger, frustration then nothing.

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Never put a woman on a pedestal.

[Austin_Meehan]

Agreed. What makes you say that Skippy?

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Here are two poems by someone that used to write here. Beware, there's cursing in them.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/deltacowolf/1092383/ (Baby Richochet)

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/deltacowolf/1114935/

[Austin_Meehan]

I'll gladly check them out and get back to you here in a minute.

[Austin_Meehan]

"Nice Guys" is a pretty straight forward poem, but I feel the author and I have differing perspectives and different writing styles. It was very enjoyable though. And as for "The 14 Truths About Chicks", I feel that him and I are on similar topics, just different ways of writing it all out. Both are fantastic pieces though, definitely inspiring.