Words of Thought

Just something i wrote unique to me as i dont rhyme often

Eyes grow tired
Of this world
And the ire
Want no more
Set it afire

Friend or foe
All must go
I am alone
They are gone
Words of thought

Author's Note

Theres alot i need to work on. Thoughts welcome

Reviews

[Just Kim]

Welcome to the cafe....This is wonderful and well expressed emotions.

[MantaStyle]

As you said, there is a lot of work to be done :)

It's a poem that talks about anger to the world and the people who live in it. I would love to know the context of this poem and the deeper meaning that I might have missed.

It also seems that you are very uncomfortable with making rhyming poetry and the poem is a bit lacking as well in terms of length and message. Not that all poems must be long but shorter poems are very hard hitting that can bring an emotional impact with just a line. Unfortunately, I do not really feel any emotions coming from the poem but maybe your explanation can clarify that.

[Lloyd]

You arent weong about me being uncomfortable with rhyming i dont particularly like doing rhymes as it feels childish to me but i know that it if im going to improve my writing it needs to be done. The poem was really meant as way way to get out the fact that people are alway on something mad at someone for something and they need to focus on there on lives more than anything. I would have made it longer but then the i would have had to force rhymes and i didnt want to do that

[MantaStyle]

There are such things as non-rhyming poems! I myself am particularly fond of them and I have written one that I like a lot.

Also, I kinda understood the poem was about anger but I didn't feel it as a philosophical statement. The poem just felt like someone who was angry and wanted to make a poem to show their anger. Good luck!