Wretched time

Tick tock,

I’m getting better,

Am I?

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I feel no different,

A little more effervescent

Tick tock.

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Time heals all hurt,

I don’t wish to forget

Tick tock says the clock.

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I want to remember the pain,

The years I was kept enslaved

tick tock.

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It seems the only thing I had

Was what was given to me

Tock tick.

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What’s moving on, and healing time,

Got to do with now and here?

Tick tock.

�"-

Stuck in nowhere,

Time means nothing

Tick tock.

�"-

The clock on the wall,

Makes me feel small,

And the batteries dead

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Awe this was a really sad piece and I feel really bad. I really think you did an excellent job on this. Thanks for sharing. :)

[PaperHearts]

This was a really moving piece! You conveyed a really poweful message in such a subtle way, and I liked how you seemed to incorporate a whole lot of different, complex emotions into the one poem to help reiterate your overall theme. The simplicity of your style of writing worked wonders, particularly in the way you started and ended your poem. :)
~PaperHearts

[Breezie Kae]

I like this poem and the repetition and everything, but I feel this could flow better. It just seems kind of choppy. Good write, though.

[Abdul Aziz]

The repetition of "tick tock" was a nice touch. It felt like a recital, interrupted by the tick tock of the clock.
The write describes the narrator sort of being stuck in limbo, unable to move on, and unable to forget the pain and sadness.

"Stuck in nowhere,
Time means nothing
Tick tock."
This, the penultimate, stanza forms the crux of the poem, I believe. And it is very well expressed.
I liked reading this. Very well written

[Ruth]

Really good ending to this poem!
Sums up the poem and the person feeling numbed as time ticks too loudly!
Wonderful
xx

[Tim]

When your searching for something and you don't know what it is exactly, time does seem to move on without you. Whether the clock is internal or external.
Nice!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing as bad as watching the clock. I like the feel of the poem. Time is our most valuable thing and also the one that make us crazy with deadlines and things that must be done. A outstanding poem. A very good ending to the poem.
Coyote

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you present static existence in an exemplary creative way~