My lover

I think, when one is in love, he has found everything.

My crown is by the garden
Did you hear his voice

My crown is like the rose of sharon
Did you hear him calling

Like a lily among thorns
Is my crown among others

Oh how handsome you are my Lover
Oh how charming

Oh i rejoice and delight in you
My crown my lover

Speak to me with your
Cooling voice

Oh how beautifull you are
My joy my lover

How attractive you are
Loooking so gorgeous

Loud and defiant
Like the stars in the sky

Arise my darling my beautiful one
And come with me

Author's Note

It think it almost well done
''if you've got no one to praise you praise your self''
yoruba proverb
but the word is that i have never been in love, so i wonder where the inspiration came from.

Reviews

[Nkosana B Masuku]

Great piece of work you have.Enjoyed the read :)

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot palx

[Nkosana B Masuku]

you welcome

[Cassie]

wow!!! this brought a smile to my face. Thank you. You have penned it really nice.

[ayosonolowo]

You're welcome
i must say i really appreciate you review

[Astro]

One thing I felt while reading this one Ayo, is that it has almost a religious overtone to it, where it feels as if your lover is a God/Goddess who you see as a shining crown in among the thorny world, and that you long to be one with Him/Her. Also, I see someone who, as you said has never been in love, but does identify someone who he sees in the crowd, in his social circle or, even a stranger that walks by but is so attractive, that he wishes to have him/her because how they feel when they are around that person. Either way, your style in this poem is very interesting. Keep writing and may you find love. Peace.

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot
for sure i will
your review really means alot

[Astro]

You're welcome.

[K.]

This was really, really good! I enjoyed reading it and it was composed very well. The only thing that could improve it is adding commas at the end of lines and capitalization at the beginning of lines. Oh, and beautiful is spelled with one L :) Great job.

[ayosonolowo]

Oh thanks alot kassie
am gonna correct that