Anybody's But My Own

Here in the land of smoke and mirrors

How I wish everything was clearer

Something just a little bit nearer

To focus on, make sense of

None of this incoherent love

That confounds the senses

Builds walls not just easily hopped fences.

The days roll by hazy and shaded

My whole world broken and jaded.

No way to voice the feelings I have inside

No where for me to go run and hide

In the night, late in the dark

I write my words to make my mark

In a way I never will be able to

The day of freedom numbered and few.

What have I done? The choices I made

All seem wrong as the assurances fade.

I made my bed, now I must lie in it

Even if I suffocate from my grave

At least I know I was the one who put myself here

All I can do is wish my life was anybodys but my own.

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

You boxed the reader in and took away all certainty of the future.
The way you lead the emotions is superb.

[Dream Weaver]

Nicely penned... A life without insecurities is like a life without meaning.
Everyone gets terrified at one time or another, facing that fear is what
makes us human. Well done.

[Stefano Ianiro]

I felt uncertainty and the longing for change, very well done!

[Ron Reardon]

I think we all feel, and have felt this very same thing. We all make decisions we later regret, or wish we had made differently. Well done!

[V. K. Harris]

Fear and saddness are felt in this piece. Very well written, I feel your emotions and the darkness hidden around the corner, the fear of giving in and the fear of opening your heart to another. Excellent write. In life it will all work out...:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Fear... our greatest obstacle and always our greatest victory... this certainly is filled with so many emotions it takes a couple times to soak it all in.

[Taylor H.]

I enjoyed this. Some of the flow was a bit choppy but its a good poem!

[Stammers]

This is good, I enjoyed it, I find your work the type you have to re-read, it's so layered, like a professional poets work would be. The flow is good, it has a neat and tidy sound, really well written.

[Antonio Valentino]

Brette, for me anyway, it comes down to one question.
Can I, do I want to, live without this person in my life?
It's a, huge, committment, so normally we are going to have, some doubts.

I'm really enjoying your writing.
It drips with passion.

Antonio