Hell on Earth

Generations have passed
since the dawning of our King
With a message of hope
 oh what joy he brings

Turn away from the shadows
 he brings the light
He’ll come for his true love
 like a thief in the night

Yet we stay in the shadows
of filth and grime
Sin has blinded us
to eternities time

Forever we are dying
in the lust filled flesh
Forgetting
 our soul has no death

Forever we will live
 flesh or not
While sin burns around us
From a hell so hot

No workers in the field
Of acid rain’s and cancer sun
No prayer’s like the ones
when time first begun.

As weakened souls continue
 blind
Too afraid to sacrifice
 leaving flesh behind

In the shadows of darkness
And sin we stay
Hoping Jesus will cast it all away
Burning flesh then stops to pray

It is then
when the world asks why
God turns his face
and begins to cry

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Babs!
Your message of the hope and love of our God is one of wonderful inspiration, and hopefully give leave peace in the hearts and spirits of all who read your words!
You have presented this message of instruction and comfort in a way that is easily understandable!

I especially like the verse:

In the shadows of darkness
and sin we stay
Hoping Jesus will cast it all away
Burning flesh then stops to pray
.....so very true!!

...the only possible "negative" critique I might make is questioning if the word "past" should be "passed"? I am not sure how you have intended to use it here, and there is no rhyme in verse four...flesh to death...but, the message is so wonderful, I would surely not let these minor differences take away from the beauty of the write at all!!!

Blessings to you!!!

[GYPSYLEAH]

Beautifully written, beautiful message.

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

Wow. I liked that a lot! Very inspirational!
What better story to write about then the greatest of all time, and the one that is still unfolding to this very day.
The rhyme scheme seemed a bit off in some areas though, it slowed down the read, broke the flow.
"Forever we will live
flesh or not
While sin burns around us
From a hell so hot"
Take the stanza for example, Line 1 rhymes with line 2, but because there are more syllables in line 1, line 2 doesn't seem to match as well as it could. Same goes for line 2 and line 4.
But, overall very enjoyable! Kudos!

[Mark]

Truly, God DOES weep when finally we turn to Him, but they are not tears of frustration or wounded pride, they are tears of JOY! For God's only wish is that we accept Him, and whatever pains of the flesh are required to drive us back into His arms from where we so willingly fled is a justifiable sacrifice.
So many over the centuries have queried how a loving God could permit so much evil and pain in His world. This in a nutshell is the reason. Struggling makes us strong. Deprivation makes us frugal. Injustice makes us just. Evil makes us realize there has to be something better. And pain drives us to seek Him out, though it was ever we who hid from Him, rather than the reverse!
Your poem so beautifully and poignantly points out that it is we who have erred, not Him, and that it is our responsibility to return, not His. Wonderfully said, Babette! Thank you!

[Lizanne]

Beautiful writing. You so adequately state it all. "As weakened souls continue blind...too afraid to sacrifice..leaving flesh behind...In the shadows of darkness..And sin we stay...Hoping Jesus will cast it all away..Burning flesh then stops to pray..It is the..when the world asks why...God turns his face... and begins to cry." Too much of importance to quote just a few lines from this stunning poem. What I feel is only my opinion, but it seems that you might be saying that mankind is premeditating his sin and when death rears it's demonic head and the flesh begins to burn, they want to turn to Jesus to intervene on their behalf with a God they never served. God turns his head and weeps with the admonition, "Sorry you never knew me, go serve the one that you have served before." The devil never forgets a debt and God will not be slighted. Brilliant writing from a skilled poetess.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

very powerful message Babs... it is true that so much of society turns a blind eye to our creator but then just expect to be forgiven in a flash... freewill is gift God gave each and every one of us but so many abuse it. AMEN!!