Wildfleour

Wildfleour

A Poem by Ralphy
"

About a friend that I respect

"

Wildfleour

 

 

In the mist of the rainforest

Breaking through the trees

Is a special place

With a mystical breeze

 

The soil so rich

Fit for a king

Deep down are the roots

Crown with an earthen ring

 

The darkness gathers

Around one spot

As the sun shines

So does it lift my heart

 

Out of the ground

Came a shock to me

 a single flower

That fights to be

 

Up she rises

To reach the light

While shadows lash

Into the night

 

The colors are brilliant

The petals many

Curling to witness

The day of plenty

 

She flaunts her colors

For many hours

She is truly a miracle

Her name is Wildfleour

 

 

 

 

 

© 2008 Ralphy


Author's Note

Ralphy
Sometimes, some people need to be Recognized

The photo is licensed to Creative Commons (CC)

I couldn't have written this without the help of Annalisa and JC...Thank you both

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I really liked this, it's a wonderful tribute and whoever this is about is a very special and lucky person to have a friend like you. Technically there are a few things that need to be brushed up. You begin the poem in the present tense, and then in the third stanza you switch to past. Also in the third stanza the way you word things is really awkward, below is a suggestion on how to smooth that out, but other than that this was lovely. cudos.

The darkness has gathered-------------to---------The darkness gathered
Around one spot----------------------------to---------around one spot
As the sun shines--------------------------to---------As the sun shines
That lifted my heart----------------------to---------My heart lifted


Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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sorry it took me so long to review this. I really liked this. Great write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I have to admitt I aven't read so much imagery place into a poem.The flower struggling to survive in anew is a take to look on to someone in life.I really like the details of how you took to describe the flower.Whom you are writing to is unknown but I love the poem itself.Great work.

your friend
sara

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ralphy, Nice work here, I really enjoyed the imagery concept of moonlight breaking through the trees,
the mystical breeze transporting the heart to places of wonder and achievement, the use of metaphors

have an uplifting effect on the reader, there are a number of ways to ponder the meaning laid before
the reader, the analogy of a wild flower existing in soil fit for majesty seems to give the vision its classic

feeling of enchanted heart inspired by nature- and by admiration embracing the idea of infatuation,
perhaps to the being of being in love, Nice job on the layout as well, written with passionate effort.
Take Care, Mike

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a nice tribute to a lucky friend!

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This is so great.
I, like many others, admire so much those certain people out there who never stop trying and have what seems to be the greatest amount of integrity known to man. You did a great job of portraying that sort of person. I especially loved your metaphor comparing such a strong person to a wildfleour.
Who ever this was written for must feel very proud.
Beautiful poem.
Sorry i took so long to answer the read request. I haven't been on in forever!

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

The picture you used was so pretty
Does the name of your poem sound the same as 'Wildflower'?
Cheers,lea

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Oh, this is such a beautiful poem. You did a marvelous job with this and I really loved it. Great write!!!

Heather

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

She must be a beautiful as the flowers. Wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This is a good write. It really shows how the simple pleasures of life can be passed up so easily. If only we would all stop to enjoy the beauty of such a happening! What a difference in our lives would it make. Maybe we would feel renewed hope for a new beginning. Maybe we can find hope to be loved as soon as we accept ourselves and are giving the chance.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

beautiful work, brought a smile to my face. You certainly captured the moment clearly. One thing though, it took me minute to realize that you meant to say "petals" of a flower instead of "pedals" as you have it. Just something a little disconcerting ... otherwise a great piece :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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