Is You

 

 

 

Is You 

 

 

 

 

Standing at the gateway

Of a crystal fortress

One can see a road paved in pearls

That bends, twirls and climbs

The avenues of your mind

 

The distance is infinite

Like driving towards a mountain

Although appearing close, it still oh so far

 

The scenery is magnificent

Like the trees rustling in the breeze

Flowers fingered painted on the sides

As the grass cushions the field of green

While an ocean wave’s hello to the shore

 

The warmth like that of the equator

On a balmy summer day

With the sun shining brightly

Lightly baking all it touches

 

 

The sounds like that of an orchestra

The birds on flutes

Distant thunder on drums

The waves clashing on cymbal

The brush on maracas

 

The aromas that scent the air

Like the red rose in full bloom

The lavender tiger lily open wide

The orchids liberating fragrances

And a simply little pine

 

But the far most epic of this journey

 the vision I see in you

Ponder in you

Hear in you

Smell in you

Want in you

...Is you

 

 

Reviews

[Dani California]

Ralphie... this is truly beautiful.

The imagery is magnificent throughout,
but I think what really makes this a true
beauty is the romance of it....


"But the far most epic of this journey

Is the vision I see in you

Ponder in you

Hear in you

Smell in you

Want in you

...Is you"



Breathtaking.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This is truely captivating. Warm expressions of a precious love. Well crafted, is flows with affections and love.

Great display of talent.

[Laura E. Aranda]

How romantic.
I think the font was kinda large to read and enjoy but I liked what i got out of it.

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a very sensual poem where you bring in many elements of the senses to express your feelings. I think that the last lines would be stronger like this:

"But the far most epic of this journey
is the vision I see
Ponder
Hear
Smell
Want

...Is you"

:)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

This is such a pretty poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Brianna Brie]

Sweet, sounds so romantic and full of promise...the promise of love that is. Wonderfully written.

[Wildfleour]

Although yet so close, although yet so far - awkward

Is the vision I see in you - take out "Is"

Ralphy, with those nitpicks taken care of, this is one of my favorite pieces that I have read of yours. You created great images and it is tender and sweet.

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This is pure heaven. Simple, yet divine.

Simply, divine . . .

"The scenery is magnificent
Like the trees rustling in the breeze
Flowers fingered painted on the sides
As the grass cushions the field of green
While an ocean wave's hello to the shore"

The imagery used here reaches into the senses and doesn't let go. I applaud how you can captivate an audience with just a single brush of the pen.

Your work lights up the sky.

And the stars are calling out your name.

[Valentine]

This is simply wonderful and if you are talking about your daughter I hope she is able to see these lines one day..Lovely write as always..you are a very gifted writer..God bless..Valentine

[emz]

I have no words to describe how i felt when reading this..... I will say beautiful, i will say romantic, i will say brilliant, i will say...... i have ran out of words

talent... you clearly ooooze

Favs deffo

x

[Angelic Darkness]

This is wonderful, and love the imagery here. The view
you brought to life here is calming, magical.

These stanzas are just captivating: The sounds like that of an orchestra

The birds on flutes

Distant thunder on drums

The waves clashing on cymbal

The brush on maracas



Great read...AD