Sort of a dark truth poem, which ends with a challenge to be optimistic in life. Just as you all, I love to hear opinions, good or bad. Thanks for reading!
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I love that the theme of pessimism is portrayed throughout this poem until the very end when optimism is introduced. I did not expect it! This made the poem very enjoyable, love a good ending! I found the rhyming effective. Dark writing is somehow very appealing to me, I suppose because it always seems to be more honest- thank you for suggesting that I read this.
Dying is stressful, sure not easy work,
maybe that's why so many are jerks. - liked this - very tongue in cheek and thought stirring.
I wasnt aware of the dying as soon as your conceived school of thought - thanks for enlightening
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you for your insight, and kind comments. I admit I have noticed you review quite a bit, and te.. read moreThank you for your insight, and kind comments. I admit I have noticed you review quite a bit, and tend to have excellent feedback. I shaming myself have to admit, I have not taken the time to read much of your work. Which I am adding to my list and defiantly will do. Thank You & Merry Christmas.
Hey - dont worry about that but please accept my gratitude for saying that. I need to read more than.. read moreHey - dont worry about that but please accept my gratitude for saying that. I need to read more than most because I have so mch to learn so the reviews are helping me too. I wish someone wold review my reviews to point me in the right direction.
Thanks again
9 Years Ago
That my friend was a mouthful, yet TOTALLY makes sense. Ha ha.
"Here is a concept I challenge and give,
just cause were dying, why not choose to live?
Dying is certain, not one will dare miss,
so live as your dying, go out in a bliss."
Words fail me... other than breathtakingly beautiful
Wow... your words have just blown me away and are so powerful in this piece I haven't even got past the first Stanza..
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, especially nice to hear from a writer creative as yourself.
9 Years Ago
Thank you for your kind words... I look forward to reading more of your wonderful creativity here at.. read moreThank you for your kind words... I look forward to reading more of your wonderful creativity here at the Cafe too. Merry Christmas :)
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Brian B. 41 yr old male, wanna be writer, Louisville, Ky. I am a sucker for stories/poems of struggle and tough times, especia.. more..