Head on My Shoulders

This song is a little more upbeat and is kind of flow-y but not super happy and jubilant. It's also unfinished so there will probably be more sometime soon.

Head on my shoulders going down in the river,

What more can I say.

The People all wave as they go down the mountain,

on board the sky train, and they were singing

Chorus: It's a free world that we open our eyes to every morn

   Everyday, every night we close.

   End with a bang, finish with the finale

   As I sing La la la la la, la la la

On the sky train you go anywhere,

But you don't know till you get there.

The sky is a road as the lights they pass by,

I close my eyes.

Chorus

Roller coaster out of control,

Hit my heart.

A shank, a stab every step of the way,

what more can I say.

I keep on smiling as I go down the river,

Thinking of her.

She clouds my thoughts and my memories

She sits in the trees.

The more I think the less I know.

"So what" says the crow,

"You don't know anything about her,

so stop where you are."

My mind has escaped from me,

it now floats in the sea.

"I can't stop now it's way too fun,

and my mind aint part of me"

So I lay back and think of her,

wondering what to do.

The trees pass as they go down the river,

what else can I say to her?

Like clockwork, an advanced machine,

with a little polish it gleams. 

Feed it love and affection.

She won't let you down.

Chorus

Finally the river has come to an end,

Right after a bend.

I see the early morning sunlight.

I close my eyes.

Reviews

[Amit Parmessur]

You write well.
Far from the world of rejections, we are ready to help maximum people get published.
I do suggest you submit a few poems to Golden Apple for our future issues.
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[Eternal.Dreamer]

I would love to hear this with music ;)

[Immortal]

Shank You =]

[Wake Up!]

Wow, that was really awesome. Typically i try to give some sort of criticism to help fellow writers, but i have none. wicked job, man(:

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow, this is another excellent piece, you have a beautiful talent