CHRISTMAS TRADITION

It's a Christmas tradition standing here in line
So the best Black Friday deals shall be mine
I dashing all through the malls parking lot
Looking for the closest empty parking slot
But searching was in vain the lot was jammed
So between two small sports cars I crammed
The midnight hour means I have a long wait
Because the mall does not open until eight
Through the dark, I search for the lines end
Twisting and turning I follow along its bend
But twilight's glow brings a shopper's worst fear
No deals for me this year for I am at the lines rear
                         Bear

Author's Note

I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility. I thank you for taking the time to read my work.

Reviews

[Zephyr]

I enjoyed reading this.
Standing in lines is so arduous!
Great work:)

[Bear]

Thank you for the review, standing still is the hardest thing for me and my arthritic knees and hips so after doing my Christmas shopping I was very inspired to write this one :~)

[Zephyr]

Haha....
My pleasure

[Érenn]

Boy... one would wish they could have the superpower to teleport right about now. Especially for the one at the rears. My Christmas tradition requires me to just sit relax and watch a movie or two? It's the out of work funk I prefer than the workout most go through during this time.

You keep your rhyme scheme prim proper natural and the structure sublime. So well done as always and a belated Christmas to you and your family.

[Bear]

Teleportation would be sweet and as I come from a large family it would save pack muling everything halfway across the state where I parked. Thank you for the review, I hope you had a good Christmas and survive New Years :~)

[Manu]

Christmas reminds me of childhood days...gathering and celebrating together with friends...it was nice to revisit my past though your write...
That's a huge queue !
It is quite touching to see people standing in a queue and waiting for their turns. I could also relate to that fear of not getting the thing at the end.
Very well described write, Bear :-)
Your Christmas tradition is a very fine piece and experience !!

[Bear]

Thank you for the review, it is strange what we will endure to fulfill traditions. Maybe Em should make a writing challenge out of that, it would be interesting how different everyone's are and how they deal with them. Hear that Emily? :~)

[Beccy]

We have Black Friday over here now, and it seems the time when our tradition of queuing goes out the window. I've never seen so many people pushing and shoving for a 'bargain' they don't really need.

Just shows you what will happen in the event of a genuine shortage, blood on the streets no doubt. :))

Beccy.

[Bear]

I agree, in the long run it is more trouble than it is worth back to shopping on line for me, thank you for stopping by and I wish you a very Merry Christmas my friend :~)

[Ehra Khan]

Another Christmas piece. I miss celebrating it. School memories *.*
I like it!

[Bear]

Thank you, did you see me at the back of the line lol :~)

[Ehra Khan]

That's you in blue? Then it's a great picture too: )

[ManasaC]

This is very nice. It does sound tiresome waiting in the serpentine line and not getting what is wanted. I loved the way you described shopping before a festival. I loved it....

[Bear]

Thank you, I have to confess that I have become lazy in my old age and do almost all my shopping on line now rather than standing in line with my walker :~(