I need a way

I need a way to find the words,

To let my voice, for once, be heard.

And let my messages, from me to all,

Be heard by those whom death has called.

 

In the world that lies after this,

You will be granted just one little wish.

What you wish for, I never will know,

But don't let is melt away, just like the snow.

 

Though your life is but mortal, Immortal you could be.

If you just wish this, very carefully.

Soon you shall be one of the only to live out their days,

In the ranks of the Angels, the ones who don't have to pay.

 

Immortal Angel, you will be, take heed in my words because thats what you need.

Wings on your back, halo on your head

Gown of dreamy white, swirling on the floor,

Clouds of color opening a single door.

 

You've a single chance to enter,

The door only opens once at the center.

If you open the door, God's kingdom revealed,

An Immoortal paradise forever more, the door behind you sealed.

Reviews

[JanuaryDreamer♥]

I believe in the last line of the second stanza, you wrote "is" but it looks like you meant "this"? Idk. I could be wrong, but it sorta doesnt make sense (: just felt i should point that out :)
Moving on to the poem. The poem was fantastic and well written (as usual :) and it was just all around AWESOME< 3 :D
~gabbz

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

I hear you my friend