ARRIVED

time is moving!

I cease to anticipate my hotel stay

indeed i dread it

my anxiety heightens

amid  the episode of stomach butterflies

and I feel a bit queasy

straight off I come closer to a visit

with my darling soldier

 

The cab driver deposits me in front

of a four-story gray building

he fetches my baggage and other accessories

up the steps to the front door

my hands quiver as I give him a tip

for his pleasantries

 

Droplets of sweat on my forehead       

are sure to fall swiftly past my eyelashes

to touch down on the step

I ring the doorbell and retrieve my hanky

to pat my face dry

I query whether someone takes note

of my very slightly swollen belly

I attempt to conceal it with my baggy coat

 

A tall young woman with jet black hair

opens the front entrance

she smiles and welcomes me

I return the grin, all the while quavering inside

she takes my coat and hangs it in the hall closet

I assume she observes my appearance

halting at my small pouch

then down to my swollen legs

she asks if I would like some tea

I reply absolutely

she smiles and disappears

I sense an awkwardness suffering

through these niceties

when truthfully, I wish for a bed

to rest my fatigued body

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ana Papaya]

This plants the seeds of curiosity. The soldier, the belly... my imagination takes me to a reunion of lovers and perhaps a soldier's surprise at discovering the pending package.
Nicely written.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Ana, much appreciated!
Warmly, B

[Ana Papaya]

You're welcome 🙂

[John the Baptist]

The young lady's ordeal continues. She is showing now, although it's still barely noticeable. Still, she is almost paranoid about what people might be seeing. I am not sure where the scene describe here is, but the lady with whom she interacts gives no hint she suspects something. Still, our heroine remains uptight. I have the feeling she is in store for more difficulties.

[Betty Hermelee]

You nailed it John! Thanks for always writing a very clear review!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Difficult moments layered over excitement and anticipation lead to exhaustion and very complex emotional moments. The thought comes of what next but that latter for now just rest. Nice build up.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank, you so much... I always appreciate your views!
Warmly, B

[JD Major]

the thrill/hell of Anticipation, of fearing the worst, the best, not knowing ...not knowing ...
I like this, Betty, please pen a sequel :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for stopping by…a lovely review!
Warmly, B
PS there are 37 sequels before this one!

[JD Major]

I'll do my 37 catch-up and await 39 :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Wonderful!

[Chris Shaw]

You express this period in time wonderfully Betty. The tension is building up and like all your other readers I am wanting more. A lovely read.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank dear Chris for always lovely reviews and your continued support!
Happy Sunday
Warmly, B

[mou]

Tension and anticipation are working delightedly. Thanks for sharing the wonderful work. I'm getting addicted to this series, Betty.
- mou

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Mou for a wonderful review, glad that you are hooked!
Warmly, B

[mou]

You're very welcome, Betty

[Weeping willow]

A most enjoyable read. Nicely expressed in many ways ;-}

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a very kind review!
Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work Betty. Thoroughly enjoyed.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so. Much Thomas my friend
Warmly, B

[Mauricio Montoya]

Betty I read write similar but definitely different but not the same comment but this write is ambitious not what you're you're saying but where and when but only you know The answer of what we read because the words grab your heart and the only reply to the question is love, Thank you sharing an Excellence write.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a fine review Mauricio
Warmly
B.

[Dave Brown]

I hope you only intend to use that bed for rest or sleep
Based upon your previous antics, I wonder if it's possible you'd meet another attractive fellow in the lobby and eventually indulge in another intimate relationship.
Tsk!

[Betty Hermelee]

You never know but I doubt it….thank for your comical review
Warmly, B