Death Before Dying

Lyrics to my song called "death Before Dying" Scroll to the bottom of the page to watch the music video I made for it.

Cautious blasphemy in my eyes
I'm so lost, I want to die
Feel my heart beat on the floor
I don't want it to beat anymore
The dead do dance when they're alone
The worst kind of pain I've ever known
Hidden behind a false display
So you won't also feel this way

Tangled in memories and thoughts
It's getting my mind tied up in knots
I'm not really alive you see
The dead inside is the real me
Now I lie tattered and torn
Wishing that I was never born
Now I leave with one thing to say
I hope that you never feel this way

Author's Note

Reviews

[Loner]

Very touching and emotional , nice piece.

[Shane Brooks]

not bad a bit on the emo side but you do have some good lines in there one thing you want to beware of in your writing is lines that have been over used to the point of cliche
i.e. tattered and torn and wish I was never born..also when you have a strong line don't settle on the second line just to keep up the rhyme scheme i.e.Cautious blasphemy in my eyes
I'm so lost, I want to die and The dead do dance when they're alone
The worst kind of pain I've ever known I really dig the first line of each phrase but the second I felt you could get the same point across stronger and still rhyme the video is impressive and shows some great dark twisted images not bad for a one man show

[Senseless whatever]

Very good write. I like the flow and the overpowering dark feel of this.

[Sean M. Addams]

very cool lyrics ... dark but very deep too and the video was very raw but well done.. nice job on this !!

[Coyote Poetry]

When the dead begin to dance for me. Time for me to hit the road running. I like the interesting tale in your words. I do feel like a escape very often. But at my age where can I escape to. A outstanding poem. You create a wild vision of death and life with your words.
Coyote

[Vanna Renee]

It's... a little too rhythmic for my taste.
But I love the way you express a different pattern of (swear at me if I'm wrong) suicidal substance.
I mean, Dear,
Most people stereotype that one who is suicidal wishes nothing good for anyone around them,
But you made a different dimension (a tesseract, if you will).
It's very interesting.

[EverEmma]

Your image is raw and very in your face. ( in a good way) Powerful and entertaining. Wonderfully composed and sung, lyrics are brilliant. Fantastic job.

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

very nice

[Aline S. Iniestra]

I loved the poem! Very painful and pouring the darkened heart out. As for the song, the lyric gets stronger with the music and your "dying" voice. Loved it! great work!

[Ruth]

AWESOME!
I love this love!
Raw and passionate, great vocals and lyrics too :)
xx