The other half of me

Midnight, hmm, sweet darkness

I stalk away from the fortress

it is time for me to leave, I've stayed to long

but this feeling is all wrong

I shouldn't be feeling this

my life was bliss

but when you smiled at me

my heart turned warmer than it used to be

I never cared about anyone

I had a heart of stone

I wish that this feeling would go

that the pain wasn't so slow

I turn back and start to go

making my heart once again whole

Author's Note

Does this sound corny?

Reviews

[John Salamone]

Nope its awesome babe...

[Wildecat]

No it doesn't sound corny. I liked your poem, I like people who write from there heart compared to metre and rhyme and all of that other poety jargon.

[chloe cruz]

No its not corny! This was really well done, it flows well I think, and your verses are so well done. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!

I stalk away from the fortress

it is time for me to leave, I've stayed to long

but this feeling is all wrong

Were my favorite lines!

[BEEGE]

This was nice.
Not corny at all if you ask me.
Good job on this one.

[Wondering Mind]

I didn't find it corny either. I would suggest retouching a little to make it flow more but, overall, it is nicely penned.

[Angel Baby]

Perfect title for this well penned poem. I don't think it's corny, makes sense to me.