Your Lies

Lights out, eyes on, as you took my hand

I swayed, you stared, till the night’s over

You whispered to me softly behind

I shivered at the cold December

 

You’re warm and brawny and white as snow

In the cold December of the year

There I felt your love, like the stars’ glow

I said “I love you” to you my dear

 

The sun shines just for you and for us

I smiled happily as I’m with you

As my heart is warm it’s full of trust

My love for you is nothing but true

 

I showed you all of my soul and love

You’re scared but you said “I love you too”

I cried, like I’m in the sky above

Causing rain to my own soul so blue

 

I gave you love, you gave me roses

You showed me things, incredible things

I hold your hand, your mind opposes

So you lied? But you’re my everything

 

You said “You’re the one” but is it true?

I loved you truly, but why break me?

I waited for you till I’m all blue

Blue as the sky above so you’ll see

 

All things went down as fast as your eye

You said I’ll wait but now why you’re with?

Liar, you are, as I saw goodbye

I cried my heart out but never bleed

 

It hurts, yes, but nothing to fear of

My room is all white to clean me up

The color glared at the one I loved

I walked without you ‘til my heart stop

 

Stopped feeling, and stopped caring for you

Moving on is the word they all say

As I cleared my throat to erase you

I woke up, happiness in my way

 

I faced tomorrow the way I should

Looking up with a smile on my heart

Now I’m in the clear, feeling all good

This nothingness ends, the new me starts.

Reviews

[gameoverman]

As someone in a relationship, I can relate. The piece is well constructed, with easy to understand emotions and language. I also love the rhyme scheme and how it subitly carries me from one line ti the next. Amazing job!

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank you for this review :) I really wanted to put a full love story in one poem. So I am thankful that you noticed that. Thank You :)

[gameoverman]

Any time, could you read my story the knightly suitor and tell me what you think?

[Jade]

wow this is a long write, but really good, enjoyed this. The feelings were amazing